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Dear Ex Mommy
Contributed by
xXcrossedXx
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Sunday, 13th February 2005 @ 09:54:47 AM in AEST
Topic:
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I’m sorry that I gave up,
I’m sure your new child will never give up.
I’m sorry that I’m fat,
I’m sure your new daughter won’t look like that.
I’m sorry that I quit,
I’m sure your new child will stick to it.
I’m sorry that I get bad grades,
I’m sure your new son will receive straight A’s.
I’m sorry that I’m not beautiful like you,
I’m sure your new child won’t be ugly too.
I’m sorry for being a horrible sister,
I’m sure your new son will be a well-behaved Mr.
I’m sorry that I said I loved you,
I’m sure your new kid will be better at that too.
I’m sorry for everything I’ve said,
I’m sure your new daughter won’t wish to be dead.
You know that one saying?
“Forgive and Forget”
Well, I’m glad its so easy for you
To forget that I live,
I just kind of hoped you might also forgive…
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Re: Dear Ex Mommy
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by bethie on
Sunday, 13th February 2005 @ 10:07:02 AM AEST
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| Another way to look at it is, you'll have a brother or sister. You will always have someone. don't be so selfish. This poem says "I'm sorry" alot, but it is a well written lament. |
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Re: Dear Ex Mommy
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by dtborchert on
Sunday, 13th February 2005 @ 10:15:03 AM AEST
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| Very strong message good write |
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Re: Dear Ex Mommy
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by Whisper on
Sunday, 13th February 2005 @ 02:59:07 PM AEST
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This one caught my eye. How sad that there are young ones and old ones too that feel that a second child can EVER replace the first. First is special regardless .No one can take that from you.
And it's God wish and yours too, way deep down, that when Your flower Blooms and all flowers come from lowly kinda homely buds.. You will be as or even More beautuiful inside and out and others Will see it too.
Whisper. |
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Re: Dear Ex Mommy
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by Whisper on
Sunday, 13th February 2005 @ 03:01:10 PM AEST
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This one caught my eye. How sad that there are young ones and old ones too that feel that a second child can EVER replace the first. First is special regardless .No one can take that from you.
And it's God wish and yours too, way deep down, that when Your flower Blooms and all flowers come from lowly kinda homely buds.. You will be as or even More beautuiful inside and out and others Will see it too.
Whisper. |
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Re: Dear Ex Mommy
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by ForeverAlone on
Sunday, 13th February 2005 @ 03:39:49 PM AEST
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Another great poem, Althoug I cant relate to this as being the first child type thing, I am still the black sheep in the family....
Long story short:
I kinda chose to be...
Yeah..
Great write
Clark |
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Re: Dear Ex Mommy
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by Jenn2004 on
Sunday, 13th February 2005 @ 04:04:12 PM AEST
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| I can def relate to this poem, i am the first child of my moms and she had kids with my step dad too. I feel like she is giving them a better life than she ever gave me. It helps to get your feelings out though. good poem. |
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Re: Dear Ex Mommy
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by thecutter on
Sunday, 13th February 2005 @ 04:50:35 PM AEST
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nice poem, i kinda know how u feel too.im not the first child, and my parents arent divorced.
but im the child that never did as well as his older brother or tried as hard. im the one who is always wrong.
i know how it feels to cry yourself to sleep feeling unwanted and unloved by your own mother.
sometimes i even hate myself for not being a better person, more like him.
but remember,your true friends love you for who you are, not who they want you to be.
keep up the good work! |
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Re: Dear Ex Mommy
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by DorianChambers on
Sunday, 13th February 2005 @ 08:29:38 PM AEST
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very nice poem, well expressed . . .
Dorian Chambers |
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Re: Dear Ex Mommy
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by freckle on
Monday, 14th February 2005 @ 06:02:30 PM AEST
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| A sad, sad poem. I am not a perfect person by far, but I have learned that if you try to really communicate, sometimes the worst problems can be overcome. I wish you the best in life and also, weight and looks do not a person make. The you inside is what truly matters. |
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Re: Dear Ex Mommy
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 17th February 2005 @ 08:18:11 PM AEST
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| Great ending. Powerful write. |
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Re: Dear Ex Mommy
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 11th June 2005 @ 08:46:43 AM AEST
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| Good flow and rhythmn in this piece and I especially love the way you wrapped it up at the end! |
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Re: Dear Ex Mommy
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by Essentially9 on
Friday, 17th June 2005 @ 09:09:14 PM AEST
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| again, i noticed a lot of repetition in this. repetition can work for a piece or against it, it can add emphasis or just annoyance. when you repeat i'm sorry/i'm sure everytime it just lessens the effect. for instance do you pay much mind to a clumsy person that says im sorry ever 6 seconds for knocking something over? you just become accustomed to it to where you dont even notice. this had a better format than the previous one also. also, another phenomal ending. |
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