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Love is War
Contributed by
ForeverAlone
on
Saturday, 12th February 2005 @ 09:59:34 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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This Love is War,
Some kind of feeling
Buried deep in our core
This love is something you can not Ignore
Like when your skin is peeling
And falling to the floor
This love is unsure
Like staring at the ceiling
When your eyesight is poor
This love is a sore
Like the pain of knowing the other part is unwilling
And it will never be more
...
This Love is War
A feeling of lore
With a broken heart thats poor
...
Never mind the rest
I must confess
...
This Love is War
And
Nothing
More
...
..
.
Copyright ©
ForeverAlone
... [
2005-02-12 21:59:34]
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Re: Love is War
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by Wesley_Dale_Willis on
Saturday, 12th February 2005 @ 10:03:44 PM AEST
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Cute little write.....Keep it up OK?
See mine. |
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Re: Love is War
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by Essentially9 on
Saturday, 12th February 2005 @ 11:58:31 PM AEST
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this was almost perfect except for this stanza,
"This Love is War
A feeling of lore
With a broken heart thats poor" seems kind of forced for rhyme scheme. though many of my stanzas can account for that too. ::sigh:: |
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Re: Love is War
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by xXcrossedXx on
Thursday, 17th February 2005 @ 07:44:00 PM AEST
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I agree that one stanza seemed a little out of place but overall this was another fantastic poem, i love your writes clark, you are great. keep it up,
--amanda-- |
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