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Last Breathe
Contributed by
breakaway2feel
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Friday, 11th February 2005 @ 10:47:40 PM in AEST
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I hold my breathe as I sink down into the depths of the black heart
Trying to excape the pain I run not knowing a particualar direction
I spiral into the ground forming a hole which I fall through
The confusion has taken my strengh and the faces that I see as I pass them rapidly laugh with enjoyment
My soul's in depretion and my heart is ripping into pices as I lie there motionless waiting to die
With a quick gasp for air I pull myself up from the water in my tub
I breathe deaply as tears stream from my eyes for I'm dead im my heart
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Re: Last Breathe
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by tifrob on
Friday, 11th February 2005 @ 11:07:26 PM AEST
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Your words hold so much pain. Yet, you and your heart are alive. Or you couldn't hurt so badly. Living is a gift. So is writing. Use your words to find your level ground.
Good luck,
J~ |
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Re: Last Breathe
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by tbirdsupercoupe on
Friday, 11th February 2005 @ 11:19:10 PM AEST
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Youve got some serious talent... Your words hold so much meaning and everything seems to flow.. I can envision what you mean in your words..
Keep it up..
James.... |
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Re: Last Breathe
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by Bleeding_Nightmares on
Saturday, 12th February 2005 @ 10:54:12 AM AEST
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| Short yet vivid, deep and well described details, excellent poem. |
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