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With Broken Promises I Tease (part four of the Seven Series)
Contributed by
Rxqueen
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Friday, 11th February 2005 @ 04:07:30 PM in AEST
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Acedia
"Thou seest how sloth wastes the sluggish body, as water is corrupted unless it moves." -Ovid quotes
Filled with desire for ease
spitting every excuse in the book
I do whatever I please
never give anything a second look
laziness is a disease
and it my body over took
with broken promises I tease
good intentions put on a hook
opportunity never do I sieze
in my soul procrastintion does cook
This life laziness did oppress
and I make no effort for salvation
Instead I embrace my sluggishness
My sloth I shall never lose
it would take too much trying
And yes, I fail to use
the time untill my dieing
My punishment?
You can toss me in a snake pit
they will be doing all the work
when it really comes down to it
Sloth...
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Re: With Broken Promises I Tease (part four of the Seven Series)
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by aprilrose on
Friday, 11th February 2005 @ 04:11:16 PM AEST
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| this poem is very well written and i cant wait to read more by you |
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Re: With Broken Promises I Tease (part four of the Seven Series)
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 11th February 2005 @ 04:37:41 PM AEST
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Oh yeah. Uh-huh. You said it! "laziness is a disease
and it my body over took" I have the worst time with that.
These are just great. Can't wait to see the next. Cheers! |
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Re: With Broken Promises I Tease (part four of the Seven Series)
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by UnlovedChild on
Friday, 11th February 2005 @ 04:50:31 PM AEST
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| Hey Sweet One!!! I love it Joci ;-). Can't wait until the next one! This one was truthful in most. Good job. |
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Re: With Broken Promises I Tease (part four of the Seven Series)
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by lostinmyself on
Friday, 11th February 2005 @ 06:02:52 PM AEST
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I really love this series so far, this isn't an exception.
There is alot of truth here, you tell it how it is.
Once again, good job.
I love this.
*hugs* Phil xxx |
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Re: With Broken Promises I Tease (part four of the Seven Series)
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by the_Ghost_Moth on
Friday, 11th February 2005 @ 07:47:12 PM AEST
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These are really interesting
and intriguing as a series.
I like your phrases,
and the punishments something else, baby.
You are a she-devil!
--Ghosty |
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Re: With Broken Promises I Tease (part four of the Seven Series)
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by blowfish_jane on
Saturday, 12th February 2005 @ 08:00:58 AM AEST
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This series is seriously kicking a*s, another great write Jocelyn im so impressed with your writes, this is incredible.
Jane x |
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Re: With Broken Promises I Tease (part four of the Seven Series)
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by freckle on
Saturday, 12th February 2005 @ 10:46:43 PM AEST
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| Another masterpiece! Again, you capture the precise essence of each one. I am going to read the next one now and then wait, anticipating the rest! |
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Re: With Broken Promises I Tease (part four of the Seven Series)
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by bobotheclown on
Wednesday, 16th February 2005 @ 03:51:39 PM AEST
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Such a great poem. I loved the rhyme
scheme and I loved the line, "with broken
promises I tease" that was sooooooooooo
great. A wonderful series of poems indeed.
Bobo (Joel) |
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