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Misson Complete
Contributed by
only4das
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Friday, 11th February 2005 @ 04:47:18 AM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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How much more can I take of you trying to tear me to shreds? The harsh words you speak; like misery without end...
What have I done to you to make you hate me? Most my life dedicated to making your life comfy...
How much more can I take before it's enough? Destroy every part of me; break me down I'm not too tough...
Would you like to watch me bleed? For you I'll slice and cut; just watch and see...
Will you take my body down once it's hung for you? Finally satisfied; work way overdue...
From you, will there be a single tear to fall? Let it drip; it's over I'm gone you don't have to stand so tall...
Now stick me in a box and throw me down a pit...your mission's complete...ended all with one last spit!
Dedicated to my family...
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Re: Misson Complete
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by Bleeding_Nightmares on
Friday, 11th February 2005 @ 05:00:47 AM AEST
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| Hardcore and sad, lots of raw feeling, excellent poem |
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Re: Misson Complete
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by Vampirequeen on
Friday, 11th February 2005 @ 05:38:47 AM AEST
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| very sad. |
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Re: Misson Complete
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by potlicker on
Friday, 11th February 2005 @ 06:03:19 AM AEST
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| I sincerly hope that this is just a poem, life with your family can be difficult at times, especially when you feel unloved, but there is always a way out besides this |
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Re: Misson Complete
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by zaknafein8891 on
Friday, 11th February 2005 @ 08:07:53 AM AEST
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| so much emotion. great poem. |
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Re: Misson Complete
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by fuzzywuzzy on
Monday, 14th February 2005 @ 03:07:21 AM AEST
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| this is kind of a mixed metaphor..are you going to cut and bleed or hang..or both? I guess you can do both..hang first and then cut..but cut before the knot is real snug?...??? |
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