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Guardians of the Gate
Contributed by
Nazmythian
on
Thursday, 10th February 2005 @ 07:00:50 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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Condemned behind massive iron bars
Separated from my inner being
Isolated within my mind, it waits
Silent
Patient
Pure
Anger drives me to it
Pushes me along dusty corridors
Seldom visited anymore
Swiftly
Steady
Sure
I know all of the safeguards
After all, I installed them myself
They do not deter me this time
Turn - Step
Twist - Jump
Duck
I allow a few razors to penetrate
Their sting feeds the fire
Crimson stains raise my ire
Forward
Right - Left
Tuck
Finally, there before me, the final test
The Guardians of the Gate
Mental mirrors of myself
Beware
Turn back
Hold
I face them with self rightous indignation
I tear them limb from limb, barehanded
Know that I am destroying peices of me
Press on
Advance
Bold
The gate before me opens at my command
I am, after all, the master of this domain
I have created this sanctuary and I enter
Cautious
Careful
Guage
Long imprisoned within these guarded walls
Willing us to become again as one
I draw the captive unto me
Give in
Succumb
RAGE
We are reunited and released
Out into the world
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Nazmythian
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Re: Guardians of the Gate
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by FleurdeSang on
Thursday, 10th February 2005 @ 07:16:46 PM AEST
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Ever-inspiring, ever-flawless... I will never know what will come out of you next, cheri... The rage, the dominance... Incredible power in these words that you weave so beautifully... Loved this piece, as I love all your others... A mental prison created by the master himself. The depth in your words is boundless. Intense. I wonder what inspired this one?
Ah, yes... the inner demons... they hide within the shadows of your mind, but they neever fully leave you... Fabulous. I can totally relate to this. Thanks so much for sharing with us your soul... Always a pleasure reading your masterpieces. If only moonlight could keep the demons of depression at bay..." Oui, cheri...if only... Forever,
Votre fleur de souffrance |
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Re: Guardians of the Gate
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by the_Ghost_Moth on
Thursday, 10th February 2005 @ 07:46:06 PM AEST
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This is quite alot of insight
and emotion to appreciate...
time to slow down and really check this out.
--Ghosty |
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Re: Guardians of the Gate
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by pixie on
Thursday, 10th February 2005 @ 08:07:08 PM AEST
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that was out of this world, I would think of something more inteligent to say but I am ***** but that was amazing work Nazzy xx
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Re: Guardians of the Gate
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 10th February 2005 @ 08:14:33 PM AEST
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I like the way you put it all in bold too, as it matches the mood and the iron bars.
I get mad, I mostly just cry, because I hate to be. Then if I need to confront (takes me a while to get up the nerve) I always seem to choose the wrong time, the wrong words, whatever...
Anyway, excellent write. Blessings. |
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Re: Guardians of the Gate
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by autumngreeneyes on
Thursday, 10th February 2005 @ 08:22:26 PM AEST
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Turn - Step
Twist - Jump
Is this a new dance???? ROTFLMAO |
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Re: Guardians of the Gate
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by Silent-No-More on
Thursday, 10th February 2005 @ 09:28:34 PM AEST
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Outstanding.
~Snemmy~
(who wants to say so much more but..... can't seem to find the right words with which to do so) |
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Re: Guardians of the Gate
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by Vampirequeen on
Friday, 11th February 2005 @ 03:41:39 AM AEST
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wow Nazzy this is so awsome .i love this part.
I allow a few razors to penetrate
Their sting feeds the fire
Crimson stains raise my ire
You truely amaze me with your poetry.I think i can a thing or two from you .
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Re: Guardians of the Gate
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by lostinmyself on
Friday, 11th February 2005 @ 11:36:44 AM AEST
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This is amazing Nazzy,
You are so creative with your words, when I write how I feel I tend to say it as it is, you are the one with the real talent. You can weave your words into a picture...
Stunning.
I hope things are better for you soon,
I look forward to your next.
Much love and many hugs,
Phil xxx |
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Re: Guardians of the Gate
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 11th February 2005 @ 12:50:42 PM AEST
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::::vroooooom:::vrroooom:::::::
Driving by to check up on my fellow poet friends. Glad I did! This is SPECTACULAR!
Haunting words...fluid tone... all made up to become an AWESOME piece of art!
Well done Naz!
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Re: Guardians of the Gate
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by Fionndruinne on
Friday, 11th February 2005 @ 05:40:11 PM AEST
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Well, I'm hoping this demon doesn't visit you often, but damn, this was one fine poem. Grim, but good. Well done.
Andrew |
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Re: Guardians of the Gate
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by Willofree on
Tuesday, 15th February 2005 @ 12:00:50 PM AEST
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Naz, This is a fantastic write: so creative and powerful with the imagery. It seems to represent inner turmoil with different parts of self in conflict with one another. Like a catharsis with a build up to a creshendo or explosion of the rage. Then a reunion or merge into cohesiveness.
That's my take anyway, Superb!
Willofree,
Terry |
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