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Eyes Sewn Shut (part three of the Seven series)
Contributed by
Rxqueen
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Thursday, 10th February 2005 @ 04:07:00 PM in AEST
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"The flower which is single need not envy the thorns that are numerous." -Sparky Rabindranath Tagore
One sin of three: "perverted love"
tainted green through and through
cursing and hating every God above
wanting everything possesed in you
into the dirt I ache to shove
your happiness, and bid adieu
to that smile fitting as a glove
on a pretty face so true.
my heart is eaten out of
happiness and virtue
Sew my eyes shut so I cannot see
what I know I deserve
why can it not be me?
My envy I shall never lose
my mind is twisted with jelousy
instead God chose to abuse
and curse me with inadequacy
My punishment?
freezing water may await
but no lesson learned
forever the fortunate will I hate
Envy...
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Re: Eyes Sewn Shut (part three of the Seven series)
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by bobotheclown on
Thursday, 10th February 2005 @ 05:05:06 PM AEST
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mmmm wonderful poem there dear. For
some reason the last line, "forever the
fortunate will I hate", really stood out to me
you captured the spirit of envy wonderfully
there. I find it interesting that you are writing
about the 7 deadly sins since i thought only
Christians believed in them, but then again
maybe you are a Christian *shrugs*. Once
again a wonderful poem filled with
wonderfullness or something like that.
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: Eyes Sewn Shut (part three of the Seven series)
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by lostinmyself on
Thursday, 10th February 2005 @ 05:30:36 PM AEST
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I don't know what to say, I really think this is the best of the three so far.
This is also my sin. My major problem is jealousy, though I don't think I'm quite like this. lol.
Brilliant write, you have hit the nail on the head with this one.
*hugs* Phil xxx |
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Re: Eyes Sewn Shut (part three of the Seven series)
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by UnlovedChild on
Thursday, 10th February 2005 @ 09:23:36 PM AEST
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| This was a really amazing right Jocie!!! A lot of visual and vivid words. Great job :-) |
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Re: Eyes Sewn Shut (part three of the Seven series)
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by the_Ghost_Moth on
Thursday, 10th February 2005 @ 09:37:03 PM AEST
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You kick ass!
This is very well designed
and executed.
I am just happy to see something
this cool.
Insightful content
and it has a very fresh feel to it.
Sexy.
--Ghosty |
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Re: Eyes Sewn Shut (part three of the Seven series)
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by blowfish_jane on
Saturday, 12th February 2005 @ 07:55:05 AM AEST
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Bravo, that was just amazing, each new poem is better than the last. I love this it's so well writen.
Jane x |
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Re: Eyes Sewn Shut (part three of the Seven series)
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by freckle on
Saturday, 12th February 2005 @ 10:40:19 PM AEST
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| Bravo yet again! These are very good. I love the section in italics! |
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