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''dont want it to end that way''
Contributed by
english-pea-pelter
on
Wednesday, 9th February 2005 @ 07:49:55 PM in AEST
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Hey friend
I don’t want it to end that way
You know, when my brother let us all hurt again
Please, lets not fight
Like I did with him that night
Right before he bled on that bed of hay
Instead of safely staying on his bed, when all he did was lay
He stared at the ceiling
And then he was kneeling
Kneeling on the hay with that knife
That tore him from us, like he tore his life
Left us with scars never to heal
His life spinning before our eyes like a rotating wheel
His eyes blank and staring, never to glow again
So please, lets not fight friend…
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Re: ''dont want it to end that way''
(User Rating: 1 )
by afterdark on
Wednesday, 9th February 2005 @ 08:53:41 PM AEST
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| Ok I gotta say this is not that great..And I am being very nice by saying even that..There is nothing here to go on at all..The feeling is all mixed and messed up..It is a very mseey write..It reads more like a phone call then a poem.. |
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Re: ''dont want it to end that way''
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by subchild on
Thursday, 10th February 2005 @ 07:10:13 AM AEST
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| Sorry but this does sound like a very lame try at poetry..What r you maybe 16 or 17.. |
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Re: ''dont want it to end that way''
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by lil_noel09 on
Thursday, 10th February 2005 @ 07:14:40 PM AEST
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| um...well...thats interesting... |
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