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no one cares
Contributed by
sheigha
on
Tuesday, 10th December 2002 @ 10:20:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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Tottering on the edge of sanity, do I do it?
No one cares
I try to think things through but everything is moving too fast
I search for a loving face in those scurrying around me
No one's looking, no one cares
I look for hope
I long for love
I listen for just one voice calling out my name
No one's speaking, No one's looking, No one cares
I make my final attempt to find a reason to stay
But there is none
I say goodbye to all around me; the peope, the places, the pain
And then I am gone, my final thought:
No one's trying, no one's speaking, no one's looking, no one cares
Copyright ©
sheigha
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2002-12-10 22:20:00] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: no one cares
(User Rating: 1 ) by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Tuesday, 10th December 2002 @ 10:27:52 PM AEST (User
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Welcome to ypdc... Honestly, I find this very well done. I can feel the indecision and the longing/hope in your poem. I can only hope that this is fictional....
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Re: no one cares
(User Rating: 1 ) by FaithHope on
Wednesday, 11th December 2002 @ 12:22:06 AM AEST (User
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This was a very moving poem. It touched me insdie because I have gone through this before. This poem is deep, and I am sure will touch all that read it. Very VERY well done!!
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Re: no one cares
(User Rating: 1 ) by nightrider on
Wednesday, 11th December 2002 @ 04:09:49 PM AEST (User
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i really like this. it sounds very familiar to me... ive gonw through/written about this kinda stuff... in fact, i still am... great write! |
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Re: no one cares
(User Rating: 0 ) by Former_Member on
Thursday, 12th December 2002 @ 08:37:47 PM AEST (User
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There's really nothing to this poem. You need to make it more descriptive and interesting. Really listen to your heart.. |
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Re: no one cares
(User Rating: 0 ) by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 11th March 2003 @ 08:57:29 PM AEST (User
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That is a very good poem for a first one. Keep up the good work
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