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Stained Glass
Contributed by
CrimsonOrgazm
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Tuesday, 8th February 2005 @ 11:24:13 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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What am I doing wrong
I'm breaking apart
My pieces cracking
I try to hold myself together
But I'm just an illusion
I'm breaking apart inside
I've come to a conclusion
It's all been a lie
My glass heart is slowly cracking
I can't breathe, my mind is racking
But I can't tell you why
The days go by
My heart is bleeding
My stained glass
My mind is reeling
The days, they pass
I'm just an illusion
Breaking apart inside
My conclusion
I'm only a lie
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2005-02-08 23:24:13]
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Re: Stained Glass
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by sicknivesevered on
Wednesday, 9th February 2005 @ 12:15:18 AM AEST
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Well, with the line "my glass heart is slowly cracking", I'd have to say 'stained glass' is in reference to a 'broken heart'. And "my heart is bleeding" gives off the impression that the glass is blood-stained... so... 'bloody heartache'. I thought this was very good. Its got a nice rhythm to it and though its short, it doesn't fail to make a point. I seem to have to ramble on for stanzas myself. =/
Anyway, excellent write! (^_^)v |
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Re: Stained Glass
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by Rocks on
Saturday, 2nd April 2005 @ 07:06:01 AM AEST
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| I agree, nice rhythm. cool write. |
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