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No Existence Reflected
Contributed by
essentially9
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Tuesday, 8th February 2005 @ 10:07:09 PM in AEST
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No Existence Reflected
Bloodless veins bleed
The impure intoxication
Of delusional perspective
Pieced together incomplete
The reflection shows nothing
Because existence is a lie
The glass of water shatters
To become completely empty
But life runs full circle
With death as the radius
The immortal hemisphere
Is squared to perfection
But a crack is still there
Copyright ©
essentially9
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2005-02-08 22:07:09]
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Re: No Existence Reflected
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by Alina on
Tuesday, 8th February 2005 @ 10:22:08 PM AEST
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Very interseting write. I enjoyed it very much and it gave me some deep insight!! Keep up the WONDERFUL work!
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Re: No Existence Reflected
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by ForeverAlone on
Tuesday, 8th February 2005 @ 10:38:30 PM AEST
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Yes Jinnifer this is very different of you..I like it though...I really enjoyed the way you controdicted the words..
Great job
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Re: No Existence Reflected
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by autumngreeneyes on
Wednesday, 9th February 2005 @ 12:33:49 AM AEST
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| I was watching Two and a half men .. the kid was trying to learn blackjack so he could go to Vegas with his dad and Uncle.. and the need to just sit even if he had to use the bathroom came up.. the math..the counting..the holding it.. He said.."I have to count and Pee my pants???" LOL... I'm trying to get your poem and it reminds me a lot of trying to get math.. the words you use are beautiful.. they just aren't coming together in my head..but there's a lot of empty space in here and things just rattle around a lot... |
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Re: No Existence Reflected
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by shelby on
Wednesday, 9th February 2005 @ 01:22:33 AM AEST
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I love the style and life cycle captured in this it reads well but also makes you think deeper to get the underlying message great job
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Re: No Existence Reflected
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by afterdark on
Wednesday, 9th February 2005 @ 07:41:32 AM AEST
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| It reminded her of Two and a half men? Alrighty then..Well dear kitten it never hit that tone tio me.Your poem is one that has meaning ten fold to it.Second to last stanza I really liked alot..But then again the entire thing was awesome. |
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Re: No Existence Reflected
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 9th February 2005 @ 12:45:40 PM AEST
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| An iteresting model you have created here. Deep and sad, very thought provoking! |
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Re: No Existence Reflected
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by UnlovedChild on
Wednesday, 9th February 2005 @ 11:45:57 PM AEST
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| Well written, extremely emotional poem. Good choice and use of words. |
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