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Forever
Contributed by
ForeverAlone
on
Tuesday, 8th February 2005 @ 06:13:28 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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Behold
I am lost
Forever Forgotten
At my own cost
Withhold
I am nothing
Forever Forgiving
At my own loss
Blindfold
I am alone
Forever Forsaken
Nailed to this cross
Untold
I am a story
Forever Forging
A past so blurry
Beautiful begining without a happy
Ending
A fragile life
Broken to pieces
Out of too much strife
His life ceases....
Copyright ©
ForeverAlone
... [
2005-02-08 18:13:28]
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Re: Forever
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by Fionndruinne on
Tuesday, 8th February 2005 @ 06:49:05 PM AEST
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Though I do tend to avoid suicide poetry, I found this beautiful, and quite well-written and styled.
May your road rise up.
Andrew |
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Re: Forever
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by Stonedraider23 on
Tuesday, 8th February 2005 @ 07:13:43 PM AEST
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| hmmm good write dont have many suicide writes but yea this one didnt seem like a suicide write but i dunno keep it up |
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Re: Forever
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by Essentially9 on
Tuesday, 8th February 2005 @ 10:56:35 PM AEST
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| spendid indeedy. i noticed your format before your beautiful beginning without a happy ending part. though i dont know why you didnt formulate the second line for all of them with a rhyme, you did so with sentence structure though. ::shrugs:: im a rhyme freak, i easily detect rhyme schemes, lol. but i like your poem. very well written, thought of, and expressed. and guess what this is better tahn 75 percent of the sites posting. what a surprise, not. =] |
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Re: Forever
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by _smelly_oranges_ on
Thursday, 10th February 2005 @ 04:59:03 AM AEST
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| this is wonderful piece |
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Re: Forever
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by xXcrossedXx on
Thursday, 17th February 2005 @ 08:02:24 PM AEST
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not one of your best, but all in all a splendid write. Don't be so hard on yourself you are a fabulous writer, absolutely fantastic, very talented. Keep it up, I want to see more of your writes.
ly,
--amanda-- |
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