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Transparent Thought
Contributed by
blueyes11
on
Tuesday, 8th February 2005 @ 06:00:33 PM in AEST
Topic:
ambiguous
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Pour out the soothing water,
Calm the fires in my mind,
Which roar and burn away each moment
With a racing hunger --
Blind to to all humanity within me.
Shall I simply now succumb?
Though it's painful and it's blissful,
And its power leaves me --
Numb and growing older by the second.
My mind tears ahead alone.
And the child cries out to slow it,
But its will has long since --
Thrown itself upon the tainted mercy,
Of the savage hunt for light.
Trampling, crushing; desparation,
The one treasure of ---
The night.
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blueyes11
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2005-02-08 18:00:33]
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Re: Transparent Thought
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by Fionndruinne on
Tuesday, 8th February 2005 @ 06:16:22 PM AEST
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This is very well-expressed. I'd try to help with a title, but choosing one is often my own hardest part of writing a poem. Keep this up, though, and may you find the Light.
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Re: Transparent Thought
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by Alina on
Tuesday, 8th February 2005 @ 07:15:01 PM AEST
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Good Poem. I think I would call it "Tainted Thoughts of Pain" but that's just me and the feeling I got from this write. Keep up the Good Work!!
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