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made of thoughts
Contributed by
karmen
on
Tuesday, 8th February 2005 @ 03:50:43 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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His soul is dark,
and his eyes are black.
Pure evil is him.
You see him standing,
right over there,
except you just walked right through him.
The sun comes out,
and the heat is perfect.
He does not like that.
He turns it shady,
and cold as ice.
This so called man,
is made of thoughts.
Our thoughts,
everyone in the world.
Not just any thoughts,
our evil thoughts.
Thoughts to kill,
and thoughts to harm all.
He is made of our horrible images.
He soaks up all our sorrows,
and attached to our hate.
This thing is nothing more,
and nothing less, than true darkness.
Copyright ©
karmen
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2005-02-08 15:50:43]
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Re: made of thoughts
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by DesolantDreamer on
Tuesday, 8th February 2005 @ 04:04:57 PM AEST
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| oh....wow. very emotional, and very true. I see where you are comming from. I believe that there is too much hate in the world, and if there wasn't as much, life would be alot more tolerable and there would be less suicides becuase suicide is a way to end the pain and get away from the evil. good write! Keep it up! |
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Re: made of thoughts
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 8th February 2005 @ 07:10:03 PM AEST
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| Interesting dark image. That we could focus all our dark thoughts onto one person, similar to the way the class clown acts out the part for the whole class' enjoyment. Thoughtful write! Cheers! |
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Re: made of thoughts
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by Alina on
Tuesday, 8th February 2005 @ 07:28:58 PM AEST
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Very interesting. This was not what I expected at all! However, I think if you added more detail and description.... the poem would become more vivid and "alive".
Good Write. Keep them coming.
ALINA
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Re: made of thoughts
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by renducomplet on
Monday, 14th November 2005 @ 03:30:03 PM AEST
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| I like the idea! More imagery would definitely help keep the reader interested. Other than that, great job! |
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