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My legacy
Contributed by
DerPinguin44
on
Monday, 7th February 2005 @ 04:57:45 PM in AEST
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I will hide my secrets,
No one shall follow me.
I will leave something,
For my family.
I will meet some men,
They will protect my secrets.
I entrust to them,
A choice I won't regret.
Old age now enclosing,
I call forth these men.
I, for my family,
want your protection.
My deathly grandfather,
His eyes enclosing,
spoke his last words,
"Trust the men..."
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2005-02-07 16:57:45]
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Re: My legacy
(User Rating: 1 )
by MLCstar on
Monday, 7th February 2005 @ 05:33:40 PM AEST
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| I did not really see a clear purpose behind your poem. The message is pretty good though, even if the rythem was off. All in all, not bad. keep at it. I liked the originality of the subject. |
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Re: My legacy
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by DerPinguin44 on
Monday, 7th February 2005 @ 09:06:46 PM AEST
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you don't see the rhyme?
follow me.- family.
secrets.-regret.
men.- protection.
the enclosing-men part kinda is supposed to not rhyme, though. |
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