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Weight of Wing
Contributed by
Xnoybis
on
Saturday, 5th February 2005 @ 01:54:38 AM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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And thoughts take off
Dense and black
as a gathering of buzzards
startled and stacked
Kings of the feast
Set back to descend
To fall upon prey
and escort it to end
Dark ushers gather
And clatter their will
No portions appease them
Ruin merely a frill
Tear and divide
Be they beasts of the hunt
Set to destroy and decypher
In the heat of the front
No Time, no mercy
They work like a clock
Tangle and dismantle
With an invisible lock
Copyright ©
Xnoybis
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2005-02-05 01:54:38]
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Re: Weight of Wing
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by SocialMisfit on
Saturday, 5th February 2005 @ 01:57:06 AM AEST
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good rhyming this is cool is it a metaphor for something?
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Re: Weight of Wing
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by Jezabel on
Saturday, 5th February 2005 @ 01:58:25 AM AEST
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| nice and dark. i like it luv |
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Re: Weight of Wing
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by Xnoybis on
Saturday, 5th February 2005 @ 02:08:26 AM AEST
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| Yes SM, in a way. Most of it is a derived metaphor from the first line. I guess it depends on if you include that line or not in the whole/question. Thanks for the interest and reviews! |
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Re: Weight of Wing
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by blowfish_jane on
Saturday, 5th February 2005 @ 04:02:38 AM AEST
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Very well writen, i liked the idea of the write as well. It came out good and im enjoying it a lot.
Jane x |
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