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Like the Rain
Contributed by
cherrycoke
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Friday, 4th February 2005 @ 10:10:27 PM in AEST
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I look outside and see the rain
Reminds me how I've failed again
Stare at the sky and feel so small
I've made God cry and angels fall
And like the rain the tears come down
I'm by myself. No one's around
To pick me up or heal my soul
Why can't the rain be beautiful?
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Re: Like the Rain
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by vanilla_flame on
Friday, 4th February 2005 @ 10:28:24 PM AEST
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awesome write! Know what you mean, I wrie only for myself to get past tough times, thats probably one reason why I don't have so many poems. If your ever in that mood again, you should try to add on to it, you could make it into an..INCREDIBLE write, lol. I like your style, you can just easily feel the emotion and get an image of the scene.
Okay I'll stop blabbering..
Keep up the good work
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Re: Like the Rain
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by TheVoice on
Friday, 4th February 2005 @ 11:21:02 PM AEST
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Very good write. You should write for no one else but you. You would be amazed at how many people will relate to them anyway.
Keep them coming.
The Voice
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Re: Like the Rain
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by Phantomdream on
Friday, 4th February 2005 @ 11:21:32 PM AEST
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| This is very sweet...and only one piece of criticism....beautiful and soul do not infact rhyme. |
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Re: Like the Rain
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by saveMEfromMYSELF on
Saturday, 5th February 2005 @ 12:06:20 AM AEST
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Hi there! This is an awsome write! Don't worry about adding more. 1) I don't think that's possible 2) it's fine the way it is. I love the imagery. I can see it as I read. The title is a good choice, that's what got me to read it. I'm inspired. Writings fun isn't it?
anyway, keep up the great-ness!
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Re: Like the Rain
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by ladyfawn on
Saturday, 5th February 2005 @ 02:06:06 AM AEST
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wonderful lill poem, complete in itself, but i would also enjoy if you add to it, ...i myself love rain, it makes the whole world look fresher:) hugs n' love nessa
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Re: Like the Rain
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by SocialMisfit on
Saturday, 5th February 2005 @ 02:08:12 AM AEST
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poetry is cool like that it is best when writen for yourself just to express what you feel.
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Re: Like the Rain
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by Silent-No-More on
Monday, 7th February 2005 @ 12:15:47 AM AEST
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I have to agree with the others... poetry should be for the writer first --- I think it loses something when written with the reader only in mind.
And with regard to your poem... personally, I always thought rain was beautiful. I think many of us can relate to this... I know I can.
Keep writing,
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Re: Like the Rain
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by cherrycoke on
Monday, 7th February 2005 @ 12:20:45 AM AEST
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| I love the rain best when it's one of those nice expected summertime showers and I enjoy sitting on my porch swing watching it. However, my feeling at the time of writing the poem was that the rain brought the sad message of my failures and limitations as a human being. Also, I know no one commented on this, but I am aware that the rain is not God actually crying, although at times I feel as though the showers He sends is a message to me that He is still overlooking all that I do, good and bad, even when I think He can't see me. |
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Re: Like the Rain
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by evilcherry312 on
Monday, 7th February 2005 @ 07:00:53 PM AEST
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I think the poem is beautiful, even with it's short length. Sometimes the feeling or emotion is conveyed in just a few words, and if more is added, then it feels strained. However, I'm sure that if you were to add more, your evident talent would prevent any strained or forced feelings from coming through.
~your evil cherry |
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Re: Like the Rain
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by _myonlyone_ on
Tuesday, 8th February 2005 @ 08:10:12 PM AEST
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that was beautiful... I wish I had half your talent.
~val |
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Re: Like the Rain
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by catz77 on
Wednesday, 9th February 2005 @ 06:53:31 PM AEST
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this is a good write and i love the whole meaning
its a great write
elizabeth |
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Re: Like the Rain
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by cherrycoke on
Friday, 11th February 2005 @ 04:26:16 PM AEST
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| i came up with the perfect tune for this .. too bad i can't write music .. maybe one day you'll hear my famous song ..... |
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