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Untitled
Contributed by
vanilla_flame
on
Friday, 4th February 2005 @ 08:41:53 PM in AEST
Topic:
secrets
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Colors have been washed
away from my world
Lifeless creatures walk
around.
Evil eyes just keep on staring
Why must you always
be on my mind?
I know that day
we were just messing around.
But was it much more?
I'm not your
comfort object,
you can't decide when I'm yours.
I can feel your constant stare
I can't read your mind, your intentions
are so unclear
I wish it all gone
I wish it was dawn
For I can't get past these nights,
I try to hate you with all my might
I'll get over you, dont worry
For this is my last writing about you
I don't care what you say
I don't care what you think
I'm going my own way...
Copyright ©
vanilla_flame
... [
2005-02-04 20:41:53]
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Re: Untitled
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by vanilla_flame on
Friday, 4th February 2005 @ 09:05:18 PM AEST
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| Wasnt sure what topic to put this under. There was a couple of them that fitted. I chose Secrets because this poem was based on a secret thats been tearing me up inside. |
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Re: Untitled
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by cherrycoke on
Friday, 4th February 2005 @ 10:18:07 PM AEST
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| i know .e.x.a.c.t.l.y. what you mean! I was in that situation, and it still haunts me. Can't say I've ever written about it before.... or have I?? Keep it up |
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Re: Untitled
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by autumngreeneyes on
Saturday, 5th February 2005 @ 01:02:28 AM AEST
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| idea for a title: Comfort Food.. (maybe?) |
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Re: Untitled
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by vanilla_flame on
Saturday, 5th February 2005 @ 02:07:07 PM AEST
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| thank you for the posts. I'm not sure Comfort Food fits it. Thank you so much though for the suggestion. |
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Re: Untitled
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by wolfman on
Sunday, 6th February 2005 @ 11:18:03 PM AEST
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how about "leaving my imaginary friend" I am not sure if that feits but this is the tone that I got from this poem, if you dont like it I will try to think of another one.
this was a good poem I liked how this individual deals with the situalion very confidently but also regetful too. please do post again.
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Re: Untitled
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by catz77 on
Monday, 7th February 2005 @ 01:32:05 AM AEST
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this is a pretty good poem
and i have a few suggestions for a title:
maybe -my way- or -i try to forget-
(just some suggestions)
anyway thanks for the comment on my poem.
elizabeth (catz77) |
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Re: Untitled
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by vanilla_flame on
Monday, 7th February 2005 @ 03:50:48 PM AEST
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| I Try to Forget, i like it thx for the comment |
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Re: Untitled
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by wolfman on
Tuesday, 8th February 2005 @ 05:27:24 PM AEST
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how about "Forgeting you, I'm moving on."
again just my opion.
wolfman |
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Re: Untitled
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by vanilla_flame on
Tuesday, 8th February 2005 @ 05:38:43 PM AEST
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ooo thats good
well now its between "I Try to Forget" and "Forgeting You, Moving On"
thx |
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Re: Untitled
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by Scarlett on
Monday, 28th February 2005 @ 06:46:24 AM AEST
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| i liked comfort food as the idea for the title, it fitted for me, either that or "insecurity blanket" or something like that? |
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