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life or death?
Contributed by
karmen
on
Friday, 4th February 2005 @ 09:41:59 AM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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Alone,
and lost in her own mind.
So young, and so confused.
She doesn't even know,
how its come to this.
Lost in her own mind,
is all there is to say.
She doesn't know what to do,
or where to go.
Whether to face the world,
or leave it.
Fear in her eyes,
is all that is seen.
Her deepest desire,
is to escape the world,
and prove people wrong.
Impossible, is what she believes,
her dreams are.
Giving up, are her only thoughts.
So its come to this,
this moment in time,
this very second.
Should she live or die?
Its all in her hands now, literally.
The gun in one hand,
or the piece of life in the other.
Life or death?
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karmen
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2005-02-04 09:41:59]
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Re: life or death?
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by Rxqueen on
Friday, 4th February 2005 @ 09:56:19 AM AEST
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| This write reminded me as a teenager... you brought me back to place I have been before. Therefore this was powerful. It was easy to read and simply stated but there is so much in betwean the lines and behind it that make you know how she's feeling. I think we can all relate to this in some way. That is why it is good you didn't give details, you allow the reader to fill in their own problems and feelings. Good write sweetie! |
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Re: life or death?
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by Quilted_rag_doll on
Friday, 4th February 2005 @ 07:40:06 PM AEST
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'Alone, and lost in her own mind'
you started this one up really good. lots of emotions she's feeling all at once...not really much form, but still a good poem. you kept it going, some rhyming here and there...overall nice job...
Auryn |
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