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Unwilling Lover
Contributed by
ForeverAlone
on
Thursday, 3rd February 2005 @ 11:27:21 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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You're face is
Engaved in my memory
Forever burning
In my soul
The flames grow higher
A black fire
Eating away at me
As a whole
My eyes are wide open
and I question
My existence
While looking at the veiw
A cross I am nailed to
This cross is you
But you will not be
Of any assistance
You leave me here
Hanging,
Bleeding,
Swinging with the wind
My body is numb
My soul is slowly leaking away
My blood is dripping
My life is slipping
And there is nowhere to go
The veiw is to good
To leave
I need one thing to live
And you are what I need to hold
To love
To cherish
To be with forever
But My life has
Lost it's luster
You took
My life
My Unwilling
Lover
Copyright ©
ForeverAlone
... [
2005-02-03 23:27:21]
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Re: Unwilling Lover
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by O7NeVeS on
Friday, 4th February 2005 @ 12:17:01 AM AEST
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| wow pretty intense...i like how u compared it to being nailed on the cross! I can def. relate.. Great write, good luck...TD |
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Re: Unwilling Lover
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by Daniela_Maria_Violin on
Saturday, 5th February 2005 @ 08:41:20 PM AEST
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Wow, very good stuff here. Just a few spelling mistakes which you may wanna fix. But all in all, a very great write.
"Engaved" -- "Engraved"
"veiw" - "view"
"you're" - "your"
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Re: Unwilling Lover
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by Essentially9 on
Saturday, 5th February 2005 @ 10:02:37 PM AEST
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| i just realized why i like your poems so much. well there are more than just this reason, but anyway. i realized that all of your poems have a different type structure with use of rhymes and stanza. variety is a good thing, and not many poets can master is successfully, but you do. |
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