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She Didn't Remember
Contributed by
dream_protector_bp
on
Thursday, 3rd February 2005 @ 09:39:55 PM in AEST
Topic:
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I said goodbye to you last night
As slowly, the night passed on
And with it, the phone hung dead at my fingertips
While the dial tone stayed on.
I waited for it to ring
With spirit I willed it to sound
But it stayed placid and did not sing
I slowly slid to the ground
Take me now lord
Make it quick and painless
For I shall not survive the night
I fear I’ve lost the fight...
As sanity leaves me last
I see my life go by so fast
Too short for one man, I believe
But then again-I now must leave
Go in peace my friends
For naught shall you see me again
Down on my knees I will forever lie
Through darkness and end...
-goodbye
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Re: She Didn't Remember
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by Twitch06 on
Thursday, 3rd February 2005 @ 09:48:27 PM AEST
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u put great expression in this, i saw what happend in ur words. a nice flow with them as well. great work here, keep it up. and im sorry for you to feel deeply in pain.
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Re: She Didn't Remember
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by dreamer_for_eternity on
Thursday, 3rd February 2005 @ 09:52:18 PM AEST
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| I felt ur emotion, you have talent in writing... I hope you feel better though |
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Re: She Didn't Remember
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by absentangel69 on
Thursday, 3rd February 2005 @ 10:39:08 PM AEST
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| i like you ending it was a perfect way to go |
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Re: She Didn't Remember
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by O7NeVeS on
Friday, 4th February 2005 @ 12:24:08 AM AEST
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| Awesome write...great flow. Really enjoyed reading it...full of emotion, very sad, great ending! TD |
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Re: She Didn't Remember
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 17th February 2005 @ 01:47:53 AM AEST
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| I can really sense how heartbroken you were when you wrote this. The emotion just floats out of this great piece. Excellent write. |
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