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I Bury Myself
Contributed by
allforyou
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Thursday, 3rd February 2005 @ 07:09:18 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Some words of advice.
Don't kill your life as I have slayed mine.
Although I still have a body,
(which I drag around when I have to),
I am very much deceased.
My mind and peace have separated.
Now all that remains is my topsy-turviness.
Rocking on my chair,
as I sink six feet in the ground.
I don't want to reenact "The Night of the Living Dead",
so I'll have to deal with the asphyxiation.
I bury myself.
If I acted upon what I commiserated,
I would unquestionably be put away.
Such an inviolable and unassailable place,
its deviating from what is ordinary.
With a quaint and mysterious face,
staring at me blasphemously.
Don't tie me to myself,
its the worst thing you could do.
My disorder is of self-abuse.
I tear at my limbs more often than the animals,
Being held by restless nights and straight-jackets,
its the most uncomfortable I've ever been.
Locked in a box, I cannot pull any Houdini tricks to escape.
I'm just the dead weight you could live without.
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allforyou
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Re: I Bury Myself
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by ToriVeigh on
Thursday, 3rd February 2005 @ 07:43:33 PM AEST
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| I don't mean this to sound cold. This is advice that was given to me by a very dear friend. I sounded a lot like you at the time. He told me to get out of myself. I think it's exactly what you need to do. Stop looking so intently at you that you miss everything else in life. |
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Re: I Bury Myself
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by savedbydeath on
Thursday, 3rd February 2005 @ 08:16:44 PM AEST
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Nice write,maybe u feel like this bc u think to negotively,its not good to always think negative,its better to stay possitive and love urself,maybe others around u make u feel dead bc they let on to believe that their lives r so great when really no ones different,well they r but they're not,awesome write i loved it,i'm gonna read some more of ur writes
**RODNEY** |
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Re: I Bury Myself
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by bonita2689 on
Thursday, 3rd February 2005 @ 08:36:05 PM AEST
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| Oooh, how very cynical but incredible! I'm in love this one. The allusions and metaphors are amazingly well fit for this poem! The self-hatred just pours out of it and then there is the word choice which was also incredible. Nicely done on the vocabulary as well. I think this is definitely a favorite! Keep Writing! |
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Re: I Bury Myself
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by Essentially9 on
Thursday, 3rd February 2005 @ 08:48:04 PM AEST
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| nothing at all to dislike about this poem. |
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Re: I Bury Myself
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by JustxAxDream on
Friday, 25th March 2005 @ 10:17:14 PM AEST
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| That this was an awsome peice..The way you use your vocabulary stands out and really makes the writing jump out and make people think...Nice job! |
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