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the skin she's in (beauty is sin)
Contributed by
rxqueen
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Tuesday, 1st February 2005 @ 12:18:14 AM in AEST
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Pennsylvania Chainsaw Massacre Style
I know her
I must,
I have seen that face...
how can you forget it
that memory would never waste...
skin so smoothe...
to flawless for me to touch
to elegant for her wear
the perfection, just too much
the skin she's in...
beauty is sin!
I must help her
take her out of it
shed her like a snake
make her peel and crack and flake!
no one should look that good
NO ONE!
The skin she's in...
beauty is sin!
I should tie her down on baren land
let her burn in mid day sun
blister and sizzle like meat on a grill
untill she is over done
will she be so perfect still?
I could soak her in water for many a day
till her flesh gets so soft and water logged
it peels in layers right away...
maybe a file, no sand paper better yet
sand her down to nothing
make me forget!
the skin she's in...
beauty is sin!
Or I could take a razor
and slice the epidermis down
muscle tissue and veins
would turn around my frown
I want to do it for her own good
no one could be so perfect...
NO ONE should!!!
I have lived so many days
wishing my life in different ways
but have come to the conclusion
beauty is an illusion
I can take it of with a little elbow grease
and then my mind will be a peace.
Take away the skin she's in...
realease her from her beautiful sin!
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rxqueen
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Re: the skin she's in (beauty is sin)
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 1st February 2005 @ 12:31:18 AM AEST
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OOO... echos of Jack the Ripper! You've caught the echos of a disturbed mind extremely well! Even the reasoning behind the deed has the ring of truth to it.
Nice Work! Cheers! |
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Re: the skin she's in (beauty is sin)
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by DorianChambers on
Tuesday, 1st February 2005 @ 12:31:48 AM AEST
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a very provacitive peice of writting not 2 mention a
bit sad, your honesty is overwhelming look 2 your
self, i'm sure there many nice qualities u r over looking, beautiful poem i did enjoy reading it lots of insight . . . wish u well . . .
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Re: the skin she's in (beauty is sin)
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by quill_and_ink on
Tuesday, 1st February 2005 @ 01:16:31 AM AEST
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| You were right - it has gruesome imagery - but not all poetry is sunshine and roses. I think this is a well written, very creative piece. You have done well to capture the character of the chainsaw massacist. I enjoyed this poem! |
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Re: the skin she's in (beauty is sin)
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by blowfish_jane on
Tuesday, 1st February 2005 @ 01:45:42 AM AEST
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God i was eating my breakfast lol.
Honestly this was really good, you have captured the killers imagination to a point it's actually disturbing.
A great write and i think i need a shrink to remove the vivid pictures in my head.
Jane x |
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Re: the skin she's in (beauty is sin)
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by Vampirequeen on
Tuesday, 1st February 2005 @ 03:15:56 AM AEST
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| Now look what you've done you made Jane lose her breakfest.lmao by the way good write. |
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Re: the skin she's in (beauty is sin)
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by pixie on
Tuesday, 1st February 2005 @ 09:02:13 AM AEST
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have missed your writing, this was excellently written
pix xx |
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Re: the skin she's in (beauty is sin)
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 1st February 2005 @ 01:51:06 PM AEST
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| I had to read this twice,I believe gruesome is an understatement.WOO HOO,very chilling write, I loved it. |
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Re: the skin she's in (beauty is sin)
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by faith_my_eyes on
Tuesday, 1st February 2005 @ 04:14:22 PM AEST
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you are simply sadistic, jocelyn!!!! Interesting write, especially the perspective you chose.
Em |
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Re: the skin she's in (beauty is sin)
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by Nazmythian on
Tuesday, 1st February 2005 @ 07:45:41 PM AEST
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I have done auto body work for years ... suddenly I see ... my tools working on ... human flesh instead of metal and fiberglass ... Hammering, Chisling, Grinding, Sanding, Filling, and Painting my living masterpiece ... Ah ha ha ha haaaaa .... C'mere my pretty I have a job for you ....
I am not nearly as disturbed as everyone says ... they are all just jealous ... LOL
Nazmythian ~ |
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Re: the skin she's in (beauty is sin)
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by autumngreeneyes on
Tuesday, 1st February 2005 @ 09:55:39 PM AEST
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ooohhhhhh
soak me
poke me
better yet
provoke me
pluck me..
ummm can ya get you know who to..
call me..ROTFLMAO... |
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Re: the skin she's in (beauty is sin)
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 3rd February 2005 @ 08:24:11 AM AEST
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Really good, Rx. Your use of language here is compelling, and I forget who I'm reading - you make a convincing chiller . . . heh.
Nice work. |
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Re: the skin she's in (beauty is sin)
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by bobotheclown on
Thursday, 3rd February 2005 @ 05:14:20 PM AEST
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creepy, crazy, and psychotic I absolutely loved
this you delved into the mind of a madman
wonderfully it makes me wonder if your
screen name is only a farce. Lol j/k. GREAT
poem.
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Re: the skin she's in (beauty is sin)
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by Spazzo on
Thursday, 3rd February 2005 @ 07:06:39 PM AEST
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Wow, cool. But yeah it kind of scared me. Hahah.
Scott |
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Re: the skin she's in (beauty is sin)
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by Silent-No-More on
Thursday, 3rd February 2005 @ 08:16:46 PM AEST
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The most amazing thing about this is that you took what is entirely insane (from a sane's person's viewpoint) and presented it from the killer's perspective - which is, to him and him alone, logical thought and reasoning. And yeh... it's disturbing to know that some might actually think like that.
Obviously, you have risen to Timebot's challenge! Well done!
~SNM~
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Re: the skin she's in (beauty is sin)
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by UnlovedChild on
Saturday, 5th February 2005 @ 04:49:53 AM AEST
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| Have you killed someone Joce? Lol jk! You got inside the mind of a killer really well though. Strong visable, though rather disturbing, images. Great write! |
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Re: the skin she's in (beauty is sin)
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by AKA_Anonymous on
Sunday, 6th February 2005 @ 07:03:44 PM AEST
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| Simply amazing |
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Re: the skin she's in (beauty is sin)
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by Bohemian_with_a_pen on
Thursday, 24th February 2005 @ 03:50:52 AM AEST
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