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I Can't
Contributed by
essentially9
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Monday, 31st January 2005 @ 11:44:05 PM in AEST
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I Can't
The flame dies
With tears from my eyes
The flame dies
Without a reason for life
Cut in half
Unraveled
Singed in imagination
Burned in reality
Pieced to whole
To fall apart
Compassion doused the flames
With watery numbness
Compassion killed the pain
With fiery emptiness
The fire dies
In your eyes
The fire dies
In your life
And I can't give it back
I can't relight what I never had
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Re: I Can't
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by emystar on
Monday, 31st January 2005 @ 11:56:16 PM AEST
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A very wise write.
huggs,
emy |
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Re: I Can't
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 1st February 2005 @ 12:18:50 AM AEST
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| Awesome write! |
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Re: I Can't
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 1st February 2005 @ 12:26:55 AM AEST
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| E9 I like the tearful expression in this sad write - especially the last line. Blessings. |
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Re: I Can't
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by venkat on
Tuesday, 1st February 2005 @ 12:35:37 AM AEST
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| Great expression..heart freezes with tragic feeling:-) venkat |
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Re: I Can't
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by ForeverAlone on
Tuesday, 1st February 2005 @ 01:27:12 AM AEST
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| Just another Usual write for you :) always above and beyond everyone here |
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Re: I Can't
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by quill_and_ink on
Tuesday, 1st February 2005 @ 01:30:18 AM AEST
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| good write! your structure and language were certainly used to effectively express yourself. |
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Re: I Can't
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by Vampirequeen on
Tuesday, 1st February 2005 @ 03:20:44 AM AEST
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| wow awsome. |
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Re: I Can't
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by Tanmaya on
Tuesday, 1st February 2005 @ 03:42:37 AM AEST
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| Very powerful and emotional. |
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Re: I Can't
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by pixie on
Tuesday, 1st February 2005 @ 09:02:45 AM AEST
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wow , that was amazingly penned
pix xx |
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Re: I Can't
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by afterdark on
Tuesday, 1st February 2005 @ 09:47:14 AM AEST
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| How can you relight what you never had,or felt..I wish that sometimes it was much easier to do..But alas it never will be..Your write is a very strong yet soothing post. |
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Re: I Can't
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by Deleterious_Dislike on
Thursday, 3rd February 2005 @ 08:25:00 AM AEST
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| This was really good. I like poem that make me feel. x X x |
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Re: I Can't
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by Deleterious_Dislike on
Thursday, 3rd February 2005 @ 08:30:02 AM AEST
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| 'poems' that make me feel *laughs* that made me sound so dumb.. 4 out of 5 * |
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