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Have you ever?
Contributed by
bratzone3559
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Monday, 31st January 2005 @ 02:14:42 PM in AEST
Topic:
Grief
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Have you ever lived my life?
Spent one minute in my shoes?
If you haven't then tell me why
You judge me as you do.
Have you ever woken up in the morning
Wondering if this was your last day on Earth?
Have you ever left your house
Unsure if you'd return?
Have you ever seen your friend get shot
Outside his favorite store?
Have you ever seen a friend die
From drugs he'd never used before?
Have you ever seen your mom get beat up
By you stepdad messed up on booze?
Have you ever had an unwanted pregnancy
Forcing you to choose?
Have you ever sat beneath the stars
Hoping God will hear?
Have you ever seen you friend drive away
After way too many beers?
Have you ever had a friend
Experiment with weed?
Have you ever covered up guilt
By doing a good deed?
Have you ever concidered suicide
As the only way?
Have you ever tried to hide yourself
Behind the things you say?
Have you ever wanted to protect
Your friends and everyone in sight?
Have you ever felt such pain
That you cried yourself to sleep at night?
Have you everlived my life?
Spent one minute in my shoes?
If you haven't then tell me why
You judge me as you do.
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Re: Have you ever?
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 31st January 2005 @ 02:21:54 PM AEST
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| About half of these things yes, half no (or not yet). This is similar to something I wrote once, although your expression of it is quite unique. I guess many of us want to ask that last question, true? Anyway, I think you expressed it better than I could have. Blessings. |
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Re: Have you ever?
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by noone on
Monday, 31st January 2005 @ 02:28:06 PM AEST
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Superb! It appeals to many people, as half of it happens in their daily lives. The feelings are expressed in a well structured way. Well done, keep writing, i love this poem,
kirsty xxx |
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Re: Have you ever?
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 31st January 2005 @ 02:41:31 PM AEST
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I thought this was well done - you structured your write well, and had some insightful points, - I would suggest some more unique wording to give this more oomph- but I am impressed at what you have achieved here -
Keep writing - |
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Re: Have you ever?
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by Whisper on
Monday, 31st January 2005 @ 08:24:37 PM AEST
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Excellent write.
Good use of words that hold the reader.
Full bodied :-)
Whisper |
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