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painting stars
Contributed by
marshmalloska
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Monday, 31st January 2005 @ 11:40:20 AM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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tomorow ill paint the stars upon my ceiling
a star for every dream i ever had
tomorow i paint the stars upon my ceiling
dreams of dreaming wont be all i ever have
tonight as i gaze up at my ceiling
tomorow will never be today
a single tear falls up to my ceiling
and drowns my dreams away
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2005-01-31 11:40:20]
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Re: painting stars
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by afterdark on
Monday, 31st January 2005 @ 12:11:58 PM AEST
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| It is good..Could have added a bit more to it since it is life poetry..But all in all a good write. |
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Re: painting stars
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by sean88 on
Monday, 31st January 2005 @ 12:33:24 PM AEST
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short but sweet... :)
sean xxx |
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Re: painting stars
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by Phantomdream on
Monday, 31st January 2005 @ 01:18:27 PM AEST
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| it's wonderful, just lovely. Might I suggest checking your spelling and grammer. It could have been longer, but this was nice. |
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Re: painting stars
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by Tanmaya on
Tuesday, 1st February 2005 @ 12:08:02 AM AEST
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Short but profound.
Beautifully expressed. |
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Re: painting stars
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by sandysandysandy on
Friday, 22nd April 2005 @ 06:55:40 AM AEST
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Never thought of painting stars on my ceiling and if I did , it would end the same way as did this poem.. a single tear falls up to the my ceiling and drowns my dreams away.....
GREAT WRITE. |
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