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Life
Contributed by
fielding88
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Monday, 31st January 2005 @ 10:37:58 AM in AEST
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Shut out the world.
Shut out the light.
Never look back
And try as you might,
Your life will be basic.
Devoid of hurt
Devoid of sadness,
But what is it worth?
You shut out the world
And you’ll find yourself
Collecting dust upon a shelf.
Nobody sees or cares to know,
What’s deep inside you do not show.
A life so basic, so simple you’ll see,
Is devoid of life and nothing to be.
What’s time without meaning?
You’ll never know in life,
But when you shut out the world,
Shut out the light,
The phrase becomes clear.
Clear as any day,
That when you shut out the world,
There’s nothing left to say.
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fielding88
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2005-01-31 10:37:58]
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Re: Life
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by tifrob on
Monday, 31st January 2005 @ 10:48:49 AM AEST
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Amen... You said a lot in one small poem. Great work.
J~ |
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Re: Life
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 31st January 2005 @ 01:12:57 PM AEST
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You're right. Sometimes it just hurts so much, and when it feels like nobody cares or you get misunderstood, it feels like you have nothing to lose by isolating yourself once again. I guess it all comes down to who are you doing it for, doesn't it? This was a good thought.
Jules (feeling sooo... tempted today) |
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Re: Life
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 31st January 2005 @ 05:04:23 PM AEST
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| really like this. everyone can probably relate on one level or another. chris |
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Re: Life
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by SimplyMe on
Monday, 31st January 2005 @ 08:34:52 PM AEST
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Just as i expected you have much talent. Excellent write. Much love.
~Alucia~ |
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Re: Life
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by n2dep2care on
Tuesday, 1st February 2005 @ 07:50:08 PM AEST
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A coruscating and insightful write. Can very much identify with it. Very well done.
Laurie |
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Re: Life
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by _myonlyone_ on
Sunday, 6th February 2005 @ 09:14:57 PM AEST
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nice... I like it. made me think.
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Re: Life
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 20th February 2005 @ 08:56:05 PM AEST
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Powerful, expressive and creative. Another masterpiece. Sometimes its more than a relief to shut out the world, and i'd say that it was definitely worth it.
Take care
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Re: Life
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by Essentially9 on
Tuesday, 19th April 2005 @ 10:01:47 PM AEST
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| excellent ending. so unexpected, yet so good. this could also do well as a song. and you know what is odd is that i thought of biology when i read this. i was thinking life as a bacteria or protist. ::thinks biology is of no use, and wonders why it even ever comes to mind:: sometimes when we shut out the world, the world still crashes down the door. |
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Re: Life
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by xXcrossedXx on
Tuesday, 21st June 2005 @ 05:58:55 PM AEST
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Nevermind, the last poem I thought was my favorite I had finally decided but this was just.. I'm more and more speechless everytime I read your poetry! Each one tops the one before.. this was a phenominal piece, please keep writing!!
xoxo
--amanda-- |
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Re: Life
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by Unbreakable on
Friday, 18th November 2005 @ 06:01:03 PM AEST
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I really love this poem. I can completely relate to every single word. And I realize that it's not an emotional write but it brought me to the verge of tears because it reflects exactly how I feel right now. The rhythm works so well too, it flows really smoothly. After reading this, I'm sitting here questioning whether it really is worth it to shut the world out. What am I missing out on? I think you definitely accomplished what you set out to do with this one. Great work.
Krystal |
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Re: Life
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by kelly_may on
Sunday, 22nd June 2008 @ 02:22:58 PM AEST
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| exellent rhyming very beautifully written |
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