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The Dreamer
Contributed by
fielding88
on
Monday, 31st January 2005 @ 10:29:31 AM in AEST
Topic:
mystical
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I lie awake,
On a bed of stone,
Dreaming such simple dreams.
My eyes are cock’d,
I am alone,
Ev’rything what it seems.
Toss and turn,
Consciousness slips,
Dreams so wickedly real.
Eyes to and fro,
Happiness dips,
I don’t know how I feel.
Where am I now?
In a world of stone,
Dreaming such simple dreams.
My eyes are cock’d,
I am alone,
Ev’rything what it seems…
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fielding88
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2005-01-31 10:29:31]
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Re: The Dreamer
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by SeptChill on
Monday, 31st January 2005 @ 02:50:51 PM AEST
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| I have a poem title The Dreamer. Yours is better, I really like the use of repetition and imagery |
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Re: The Dreamer
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by SimplyMe on
Monday, 31st January 2005 @ 08:43:24 PM AEST
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I get lost in dreams sometimes... just to wake up to reality.. anyways Another peice i enjoyed i think i'll read it again.
~Alucia~ |
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Re: The Dreamer
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by Cesaria1 on
Wednesday, 16th February 2005 @ 09:40:07 PM AEST
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| good insight. short but deep. i like. |
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Re: The Dreamer
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 20th February 2005 @ 09:00:23 PM AEST
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Short but sweet and just as beautiful as the others that I have read of yours so far. Nicely done. :o)
Take care
- Becca |
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Re: The Dreamer
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by Essentially9 on
Friday, 25th March 2005 @ 10:51:12 PM AEST
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| shakespeare, i basically have no liking for his work, lol. but this is better than his in my mind. very well done indeed. |
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Re: The Dreamer
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by xXcrossedXx on
Tuesday, 21st June 2005 @ 05:26:00 PM AEST
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This is absolutely PHENOMINAL!! My favorite and I actually mean this time, I have decided this is it! I love this!! I also enjoyed the ellision (i think its called (ex: ev'rything)) I have thought of how to fit it in to my work I guess I'm just not there yet, this was very well done.
Just phenominal!
--amanda-- |
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Re: The Dreamer
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by hauntedscorp on
Wednesday, 2nd November 2005 @ 02:08:03 PM AEST
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I always enjoy a good, veiled write. You did well with this piece Marc. The flow was smooth, your words were left open to interpretation, and it really gets the readers thoughts going. Like usual, I found nothing to critique on your write! Keep it up!
Scorp. |
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