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Exploit Me
Contributed by
Jane_Doe
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Monday, 31st January 2005 @ 01:04:21 AM in AEST
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Living in an unfulfilled dream,
Trying to mend a broken seam,
Looking like a pretty doll,
He told her that she'd have it all.
A burst of warm air she can breath,
A reminder of what she couldn't conceive,
Wishing she could turn back time,
She knew it was her time to die.
He breaks her arms off one by one,
Pulls her string so she says she's having fun,
She had put her life into his hands,
Not knowing a thing about this man.
He's done it before and he'll do it again,
Exploiting the sweet song of the wren,
Taking a life for a simple screw,
Watch out, next time it could be you.
Copyright ©
Jane_Doe
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2005-01-31 01:04:21]
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Re: Exploit Me
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by pinkflurojacket on
Monday, 31st January 2005 @ 01:06:45 AM AEST
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| its very blatant. i like it and all it just leaves nohing to the imagination |
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Re: Exploit Me
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by emystar on
Monday, 31st January 2005 @ 01:16:38 AM AEST
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Such a beautifull write and oh so true.
keep writing as it's a masterpeice 'cause I know the feelings.
but for the grace of God this can be anyone.
i know God has takin care of me when i couldn't do it myself.
I know in my life I've taken so many chanes and really wasted my time when I should have been thinking about something else other than myself.
huggs,
emy |
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Re: Exploit Me
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by Whitelightning77 on
Monday, 31st January 2005 @ 01:18:25 AM AEST
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Predators Casting
Nets to ensnare innocence
Run away quickly!
Thanks for sharing this |
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Re: Exploit Me
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by Vampirequeen on
Monday, 31st January 2005 @ 01:58:30 AM AEST
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very wise words.
great write. |
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Re: Exploit Me
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by blowfish_jane on
Monday, 31st January 2005 @ 04:19:37 AM AEST
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Bravo i liked it a lot, it's a very interesting write.
I liked the flow and the rythem as well.
You have writen this piece so well. Good job.
Jane x |
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Re: Exploit Me
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by Stitch on
Monday, 31st January 2005 @ 07:29:15 AM AEST
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Thanks for the warning. A miserable one to have to learn as I well know, but a very well done and descriptive poem.
Stitch |
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Re: Exploit Me
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by UnlovedChild on
Sunday, 27th February 2005 @ 04:45:56 AM AEST
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| Great amusing write. |
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Re: Exploit Me
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by ihopeyouchokex on
Saturday, 12th March 2005 @ 10:52:52 AM AEST
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I really love this poem,i love the figuritive writing in it, truly amazing
great write |
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