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Gene and Lucy Birdsong, Their names on both sides of the poem.
Contributed by
Wesley_Dale_Willis
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Sunday, 30th January 2005 @ 09:09:47 PM in AEST
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Gradation rays of time in love a song,
Engraved in tears with faces all alone,
Nomadic seasons turn to golden brown,
Emotions from the past will yield a praise,
Along the crescents edge a golden Fra,
Notorious elements light the dawn.
Departure from this life exempt in red,
Linguistic forms of love in life a thrill,
United fifty years, the two of you,
Celestial falling stars embrace their arc,
Your love in life the stars that fade away,
Beyond the everlasting-hearts will throb,
In cheer a realm of laughter, you and I,
Reserved in words your names forever clear,
Delightful dancing daisies in the field,
Symbolic in their swaying restful bliss,
Offense of time will float your waterloo,
Neglecting love of others, hate will spawn,
Genetic Gene, angelic Lucy, Birds-Song.
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Re: Gene and Lucy Birdsong, Their names on both sides of the poem.
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by Jenni_K on
Sunday, 30th January 2005 @ 10:38:04 PM AEST
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Great Acrostic, Wes...I am impressed!!
Jenni |
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Re: Gene and Lucy Birdsong, Their names on both sides of the poem.
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by emystar on
Sunday, 30th January 2005 @ 11:59:59 PM AEST
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Now i don't know 'bout the name or style but this is such a beautifull, hevenly write.
luv, huggs,
emy
a masterpeice of beauty. |
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Re: Gene and Lucy Birdsong, Their names on both sides of the poem.
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by lilschizoboy07 on
Sunday, 6th February 2005 @ 09:32:07 PM AEST
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| I've just read your tanka and now this...you're starting to intrigue me, mate. Your style is individual, I'll give you that. |
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Re: Gene and Lucy Birdsong, Their names on both sides of the poem.
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by freckle on
Sunday, 6th February 2005 @ 09:36:27 PM AEST
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Awww, I like it! It is so sweet and ahhh, just makes you sigh in pleasure at the depth of the happiness.
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Re: Gene and Lucy Birdsong, Their names on both sides of the poem.
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by sammydid on
Monday, 7th February 2005 @ 09:00:27 PM AEST
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OMG. I AM IN AWE. I HAVE RESORTED TO SAYING 'OMG' IN A COMMENT.
that was great! i just cried. really. okay, not really, but youre awesome! |
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Re: Gene and Lucy Birdsong, Their names on both sides of the poem.
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by XxCrYiNg4YoUxX on
Monday, 7th February 2005 @ 09:16:40 PM AEST
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| I thought your peom was very well written it made me think.....not many things do that .. |
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Re: Gene and Lucy Birdsong, Their names on both sides of the poem.
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by Essentially9 on
Tuesday, 8th February 2005 @ 10:13:52 PM AEST
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| this was very good indeedy. a very creative touch with the use of the title. iambic pentimeter, hard meter to work with, but like shakespeares work, yields success. |
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Re: Gene and Lucy Birdsong, Their names on both sides of the poem.
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by Scarlett on
Tuesday, 1st March 2005 @ 04:29:40 AM AEST
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that was brilliant, not just the content but the pentameter and the double sided acrostic. quite breathtaking.
can see the effort therefore emotion that must have gone into this and i like it more for it. |
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