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An Early Blooming Rose
Contributed by
quill_and_ink
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Sunday, 30th January 2005 @ 08:38:08 PM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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Do they see,
the rose has bloomed already?
Before the Spring has come,
before its growth is done?
Their eyes are shut,
their eyes are shut,
there is still time.
Do they know,
the bird has learnt to fly?
Before its left the nest,
from out its mothers breast?
Their minds are closed,
their minds are closed,
there is still time.
Do they see,
that snow falls to the Earth?
Before the dawn of Autumn,
before the leaves have fallen?
Their backs are turned,
their backs are turned,
there is still time.
They don't care,
that the snow has melted,
that the bird has dithered,
while the rose has withered.
They walk away,
they walk away,
it is too late.
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Re: An Early Blooming Rose
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 30th January 2005 @ 08:41:02 PM AEST
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| Wow...This is a deep write. It's wonderful. The line repetition has a great effect on the poem. Excellent work. Awesome piece. |
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Re: An Early Blooming Rose
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by TheNextRobertFrost on
Sunday, 30th January 2005 @ 08:48:41 PM AEST
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Very nice. Beatiful write
Good luck with your poetry
T.A.B |
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Re: An Early Blooming Rose
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by SimplyMe on
Sunday, 30th January 2005 @ 09:13:37 PM AEST
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Great write and welcome to YPDC. Much love
~Alucia~ |
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Re: An Early Blooming Rose
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by Essentially9 on
Sunday, 30th January 2005 @ 10:03:17 PM AEST
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| very good for one of your first poems. needs to have less repetition though. |
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Re: An Early Blooming Rose
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by emystar on
Sunday, 30th January 2005 @ 11:46:57 PM AEST
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This one will melt anyone's heart.
Such a beautifull write.
huggs,
emy |
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Re: An Early Blooming Rose
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by Tanmaya on
Monday, 31st January 2005 @ 07:59:06 AM AEST
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This is powerful, and thought-provoking.
I liked the lucid style of writing, and the sensitivity expressed.
Keep writing... |
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