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Sphere Shaped Box
Contributed by
ROUGE
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Sunday, 30th January 2005 @ 12:36:37 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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The radio plays my favorite song,
Sometimes I refuse to sing along.
And yet a new order has taken over my tongue.
But what are four walls?
They are what they contain.
For what is not taken, will evidently remain.
The reconing has no end,
And no body has realized that I've had the sweetest notion.
One's deepest ocean can explode,
And not returning to that road.
This is not the peace,
This is not war.
This is the simple problem of being completely unsure; undecided.
And yet silence cant relieve my mouth,
These are my diaries screaming out.
For the calm is after the storm,
And in another realm,
Fingers are'nt yours.
This is'nt the midst,
Only a start...fortunately...
Leaving everyone,
An Amplified Heart.
Copyright ©
ROUGE
... [
2005-01-30 12:36:37]
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Re: Sphere Shaped Box
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 30th January 2005 @ 12:44:46 PM AEST
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| "Amplified " is a good word for what happens here. When we write emotions, they are often amplified from the originals. In a perverse way, we often believe we know other people through their poetry; but that's only true sometimes. Anyway, you're getting a good start. Keep writing! Cheers! |
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Re: Sphere Shaped Box
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by Quilted_rag_doll on
Sunday, 30th January 2005 @ 01:00:37 PM AEST
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i likes it very much...good write...good form and everything, some very good lines.
overall, i liked the whole thing! keep it up!
¤-::..Ande..::-¤ |
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Re: Sphere Shaped Box
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by Phantomdream on
Sunday, 30th January 2005 @ 03:21:30 PM AEST
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| This is very individual, but nice. Deep, and emotional, and though you say it's a dark poem, it strikes me as thoughtful poetry. Reconing, is spelled reckoning. |
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