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Daddy Shouted At Me
Contributed by
pixie
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Sunday, 30th January 2005 @ 11:43:09 AM in AEST
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Daddy shouted at me last night,
After me & my step mother had a fight,
He always takes her side it’s just not fair,
Since she’s been around about me he doesn’t care.
I have been pushed into the background,
She cackled & told me they don’t want me around,
I can’t talk to me Daddy anymore,
As hanging round his neck is his new whore.
She told me Daddy doesn’t love me anyway,
& that by his side & in his bed she’ll forever stay,
I knew that I had to get my sweet revenge,
That my pain I just had to avenge.
So one night an evil plan I began to hatch,
I found some lighter fuel & a match,
I thought I would show that evil, nasty *****,
I would play the part of Dorothy & kill the wicked witch.
One night while she was sleeping next to my Dad,
I had to take it, it was the only chance I had,
I poured the lighter fuel onto their bed,
Not one of them knowing they’d soon be dead.
My Daddy held her high over me,
I was his little girl & could not let that be,
Tears fell down my cheek as I bid my Daddy goodbye,
But only for the death of my Dad would I cry.
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Re: Daddy Shouted At Me
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by lostinmyself on
Sunday, 30th January 2005 @ 11:53:37 AM AEST
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Woah hun... I've missed your poems so bad.
This is..um..rather scary. lol
But very creative as all your poems are.
Great write sweetie,
hugs* Phil xxx
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Re: Daddy Shouted At Me
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by ROUGE on
Sunday, 30th January 2005 @ 12:06:24 PM AEST
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nice work, very vivid. kill her i guess.
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Re: Daddy Shouted At Me
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by afterdark on
Sunday, 30th January 2005 @ 12:09:05 PM AEST
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First off much welcome back..I really loved this piece here..Your dark poems are alwasy so great to read.
My Daddy held her high over me,
I was his little girl & could not let that be,
Tears fell down my cheek as I bid my Daddy goodbye,
But only for the death of my Dad would I cry.
That stanza was perfect..This whole piece screamed out to me. |
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Re: Daddy Shouted At Me
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by noone on
Sunday, 30th January 2005 @ 12:32:28 PM AEST
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This is very good!! Quite scary but good,lol. I haven't read any of your other poems as i am new on this site but i am definetly going to check them out, this was great, well done!
kirsty xx |
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Re: Daddy Shouted At Me
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by Willofree on
Sunday, 30th January 2005 @ 12:50:39 PM AEST
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Provocative write expressing anger, but more even, hurt and pain. A nice thing about fantasy, you can kill and get away with it.
May the adult woman in you prevail
Powerful write
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Re: Daddy Shouted At Me
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 30th January 2005 @ 12:51:29 PM AEST
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| Scary but nicely done. I've seen others go through those feelings. It's a good scenario for "writing it out," so keep it up! Blessings, Pixie! |
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Re: Daddy Shouted At Me
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by Whisper on
Sunday, 30th January 2005 @ 12:54:44 PM AEST
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Your father didnt chose her over you. He sided with what he felt was right for both. When you are grown older you will look back and you will back up your partner in life as your father has commited too.
Its only a opinion I hope it resolves itself soon and all can move on. Its no fun to sweat the small things.
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Re: Daddy Shouted At Me
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by ladyfawn on
Sunday, 30th January 2005 @ 01:16:29 PM AEST
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yeppers! hugs n' love nessa
@->>->:- |
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Re: Daddy Shouted At Me
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by Jane_Doe on
Sunday, 30th January 2005 @ 01:27:28 PM AEST
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| I really loved this. It had just the perfect amount of insanity in it. Really, it was amazing. |
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Re: Daddy Shouted At Me
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by autumngreeneyes on
Sunday, 30th January 2005 @ 01:56:38 PM AEST
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| geez pixilator.. many happy returns..LOL. ding dong the witch is dead I guess.. rotflmao..ya know it isn't a dark write any more once you strike the match??? |
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Re: Daddy Shouted At Me
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by blowfish_jane on
Sunday, 30th January 2005 @ 03:04:06 PM AEST
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What an icredible write, i just love the feeling of sadness and pain in it. Good emotional dark write. 5 stars.
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Re: Daddy Shouted At Me
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by Quilted_rag_doll on
Sunday, 30th January 2005 @ 03:48:30 PM AEST
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very good! i love the last four lines! wonderful poem!
¤-::..Ande..::-¤ |
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Re: Daddy Shouted At Me
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by DorianChambers on
Sunday, 30th January 2005 @ 04:19:29 PM AEST
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sorry 4 your pain, here's wishing u a gentle recovery, beautifuly expressed . . .
Dorian Chambers |
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Re: Daddy Shouted At Me
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by Spazzo on
Sunday, 30th January 2005 @ 06:33:01 PM AEST
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Welcome back! Very nice poem, expresses how you feel really well. I hope you feel better.
Spazzo |
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Re: Daddy Shouted At Me
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by AKA_Anonymous on
Sunday, 30th January 2005 @ 10:20:05 PM AEST
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| Very good write... Lots of emotion... Really makes you think.... |
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Re: Daddy Shouted At Me
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by shadowed_soul on
Thursday, 3rd February 2005 @ 01:06:22 PM AEST
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This is a brilliant poem. I can really imagine it. I'm going to go read the rest of your poems now, lol. Well done. Keep it up.
Melissa x |
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Re: Daddy Shouted At Me
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by Jane_Doe on
Saturday, 11th June 2005 @ 03:15:14 PM AEST
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| I read this poem to my friend Greg and he said that he loves you. |
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