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Bloody Kiss
Contributed by
Jane_Doe
on
Saturday, 29th January 2005 @ 07:34:50 PM in AEST
Topic:
psychoticpoems
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I want you dead,
I want your head,
Beneath my heavy foot.
So full of hate,
I cannot wait,
To make you scream in pain.
Hate me back,
So I can attack,
But you tell me that you love me.
I love you more,
You stupid whore,
That's why I hide my gun.
My madness grew,
I'm dismembering you,
Starting at your toes.
My bravery blooms,
I'll fill your wounds,
With salt and lemon juice.
I'm sorry now,
So please allow,
My lips upon your throat.
A feeling so new,
They rip right through,
Enjoy your bloody kiss.
Copyright ©
Jane_Doe
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2005-01-29 19:34:50]
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Re: Bloody Kiss
(User Rating: 1 )
by afterdark on
Saturday, 29th January 2005 @ 07:37:47 PM AEST
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| This should have been so much better.I wanted to have it be better also..Your wording was off in places and it did not have what I like in this type of poetry.. |
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Re: Bloody Kiss
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by breny on
Saturday, 29th January 2005 @ 07:38:55 PM AEST
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hmmm...i don't really know how to react to this poem.
well you describe your feelings very well....
~Brenna~ |
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Re: Bloody Kiss
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by Kalyle on
Saturday, 29th January 2005 @ 11:16:56 PM AEST
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| I felt the same way before. or atleast simular. its good that u experss your feelings and not act on them at least to harshly. |
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Re: Bloody Kiss
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by Jezebella on
Thursday, 3rd February 2005 @ 09:23:48 PM AEST
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| I enjoyed this writing a lot and I really liked the last verse. |
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Re: Bloody Kiss
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by UnlovedChild on
Sunday, 27th February 2005 @ 04:43:11 AM AEST
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| Your strongest verse was the last. Nice write. |
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