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> scattered <
Contributed by
poeteeza
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Saturday, 29th January 2005 @ 02:10:47 AM in AEST
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scattered across a wide open canvas
a portrait of torment with expand with
brushstrokes of blood, painting the language
which teardrops will translate into the colors of anguish..
each emotion will be protrayed in detail, accordingly
outlines of despair will compliment each, supportively..
but this is an endless picture -
no beginning, no end, just circles of scripture...
repeating themselves a million times.
a beautiful medally of incomplete lines
After it dries, you may view my still life: Depression
with all of its guilt-tainted, manipulated
forms of expression..
just don't bother trying to make a connection
because inspite of any hopeful "good intension"
my soul wanders ALONE through these stories i tell-
unattached and indifferent
in my own living hell
Copyright ©
poeteeza
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2005-01-29 02:10:47]
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Re: > scattered <
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by Xnoybis on
Saturday, 29th January 2005 @ 03:13:54 AM AEST
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| Very nice, I liked it. Sort of reminds me of something I wrote way back when, but not nearly as articulated. Thanks for sharing! |
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Re: > scattered <
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by Xnoybis on
Saturday, 29th January 2005 @ 03:15:55 AM AEST
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| Ack, I meant what I wrote wasn't nearly as articulated as this was. -2 to me for poor wording, sorry! |
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Re: > scattered <
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by Daniela_Maria_Violin on
Saturday, 29th January 2005 @ 10:37:57 AM AEST
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This is a good write. If you clean up your spelling it would be perfect.
medally - medley
intension - intention
protrayed - portrayed
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Re: > scattered <
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by n2dep2care on
Saturday, 29th January 2005 @ 05:49:46 PM AEST
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Insightful and personal write. Very easy to relate to. Very well done!
Laurie
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Re: > scattered <
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by poeteeza on
Saturday, 29th January 2005 @ 08:47:22 PM AEST
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thank you for commenting.
i will definitely work on my spelling. ;o) |
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Re: > scattered <
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 5th March 2005 @ 01:23:13 AM AEST
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| You really do have a wonderful way with words. Nice work. |
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