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Loneliness
Contributed by
dreamer_for_eternity
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Thursday, 27th January 2005 @ 07:41:06 PM in AEST
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Utter loneliness taking over thy soul
Causes one to lose control
Blood flow weakens
Person growing cold
Heartbeat slows
Now helping with thy woe
Close yourself in a tranquil mindset
Don't let go or you'll be bound to forget
That always will there be
A hidden place for you to see
You will not be lonely there
Where no one else exists
And you won't have a care
So wherever you are
Close your eyes
Forget about your scars
And pause from your life, your lie
Loneliness will still linger
But no longer it will be a stinger
You will go insane
In your sought for, fought for claim
But there's no one to blame
In the end, you'll be glad you came
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Re: Loneliness
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by afterdark on
Thursday, 27th January 2005 @ 07:46:15 PM AEST
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Ok I was waiting and hoping for the disturbing part..Where is it?
Perhaps dark poetry is not your forte. |
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Re: Loneliness
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by bobotheclown on
Thursday, 27th January 2005 @ 09:04:56 PM AEST
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good poem didn't think it was disturbing
though. I agree sometimes it is good to close
your eyes and just forget about what is going
on at the moment. Keep up the writing I liked
how this was written.
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: Loneliness
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by ForeverAlone on
Thursday, 27th January 2005 @ 09:36:41 PM AEST
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| Not disturbing, but a good write non the less |
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Re: Loneliness
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 28th January 2005 @ 12:49:01 AM AEST
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| I'd almost call it "spiritual poetry" since the last part was sort of winding down to where you'd find peace. Good write though. Blessings. |
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Re: Loneliness
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by dreamer_for_eternity on
Friday, 28th January 2005 @ 12:26:59 PM AEST
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| thx 4 any compliments, umm if you are saying you don't find it disturbing, i spose i was a little misleading, but i didnt say it was disturbing, just to the people that are more happy-go-lucky no drama type, the wording makes it more disturbing not the plot, trust me, i know its not that dark, i have other dark poetry that would blow this one out of the water if it were a dark poetry contest, but all in all,i love this one |
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Re: Loneliness
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by allforyou on
Tuesday, 1st February 2005 @ 10:25:30 PM AEST
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That is an amazing poem, seriously. I'm actually speechless.....
--Kara |
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