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i did
Contributed by
frannykilledzooey
on
Tuesday, 25th January 2005 @ 06:25:09 PM in AEST
Topic:
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"pleasure is under-rated"
god
if i can get away
with this one
i'll owe an eternity
of burning candles
burning me
or
wise women
telling me i told you so
like you were so right
i should have never
but doing defines
me
so i did
Copyright ©
frannykilledzooey
... [
2005-01-25 18:25:09]
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Re: i did
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 25th January 2005 @ 06:35:35 PM AEST
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| Short and to the point. Interesting write. Good job. |
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Re: i did
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by Live2Die on
Tuesday, 25th January 2005 @ 06:41:26 PM AEST
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| Sort of confusing, but once you've read it all it's really good. Nice write. |
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Re: i did
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by zenmind on
Tuesday, 25th January 2005 @ 06:58:45 PM AEST
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This felt....kind of zangy, if that makes sense. I liked it because it is different than most of the poems on this site. I can't tell if this is really good, or if it's just worded in a strange way, but hey, either way, it's a good read.
Be True,
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Re: i did
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 31st January 2005 @ 02:37:10 PM AEST
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interesting write - I thought it was
i'll owe an eternity
of burning candles
burning me
or
wise women
telling me i told you so
strong here, but you need to get rid of one of the burnings to alleviate this repetition, |
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Re: i did
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by Dri on
Monday, 31st January 2005 @ 05:54:11 PM AEST
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| this has such a... feel... it's hard to describe. vibrant. wonderful write! |
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