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Feeling
Contributed by
fielding88
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Tuesday, 25th January 2005 @ 05:32:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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Is the feeling gone?
Was it ever there?
This feeling I had,
That you did share?
Why am I so empty,
Void of loveless thoughts?
I want to speak my mind
But I'm tied in knots.
The spark that lit inside me
The day that I met you
Was to burn forever,
And grow to be,
A love and life anew.
What has that become today?
What have I done to grow?
What did I do, what did I say,
Or how many chances did I show
That I’m not ready for any real life
Or love to keep me going?
I know one thing from what I’ve felt.
You’re faceless, not special at all.
I’m blind to you
And with all I’ve dealt,
But I’ll still come running when you call.
I need you, and that’s not enough.
Reciprocation is key.
Without you here,
My life would be rough,
And with no reason to be.
Is the feeling gone?
I’m not afraid.
Love is never what it seems.
The feeling will come back,
With it, my dreams,
And a whole new life I’ll unpack.
Copyright ©
fielding88
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2005-01-25 17:32:00]
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Re: Feeling
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by waitingintheshadows on
Tuesday, 25th January 2005 @ 05:34:51 PM AEST
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| beautiful poem..... |
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Re: Feeling
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by Trisha on
Tuesday, 25th January 2005 @ 05:40:08 PM AEST
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| Hey there. how are you? this is a good poem |
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Re: Feeling
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by ElatedNBliss on
Tuesday, 25th January 2005 @ 05:52:16 PM AEST
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| if there's on thing i've learned a little to well...this is it...i whole heartedly agree love is never what it seems. |
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Re: Feeling
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by Essentially9 on
Sunday, 10th April 2005 @ 09:56:01 PM AEST
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| so well written marc. you want critiques, and i can never offer any. for one that loves to see flaws, i cant find any in yours. =] this seems different from a lot of yours, and i cant exactly find out why, i guess it must be the style. i like the optomistic and happyish ending in this. my endings just get more miserable, lol. =] |
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Re: Feeling
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by xXcrossedXx on
Thursday, 16th June 2005 @ 02:59:53 PM AEST
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I agree with essentially9 this poem had a happy feeling about it and was written very nicely. I think you did a great job with the first stanza, it sets the whole mood for the poem. Very nice write Marc.
--amanda-- |
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Re: Feeling
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by Wachumiri on
Saturday, 30th July 2005 @ 07:31:51 PM AEST
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Well written. One for the heart to understand.
Take care.
David |
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