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Fallen from Grace
Contributed by
essentially9
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Sunday, 23rd January 2005 @ 08:01:48 PM in AEST
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Fallen from Grace
I go through every day
Thinking my existence is a waste
I just take up space
I can easily be erased
And won't be missed in any case
Because I can't even show my face
That's hidden behind a mask of pain
I'm becoming more frayed
With this decision to stay and fade
My footprints won't leave a trace
When my existence is erased
My footprints won't leave a trace
Because my existence is a waste
I'm being further erased
With every day
Since I've fallen from grace
I'm being further erased
With every day of pain
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Re: Fallen from Grace
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by Stitch on
Sunday, 23rd January 2005 @ 08:03:35 PM AEST
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Interesting juxtaposition of such a sad topic with the use of rhyme.
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Re: Fallen from Grace
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 23rd January 2005 @ 08:08:59 PM AEST
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| Such a sad but beautiful write. Excellent job. |
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Re: Fallen from Grace
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 23rd January 2005 @ 08:13:18 PM AEST
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| It's a well expressed sadness. (of course you would be missed here if you really left). Blessings. |
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Re: Fallen from Grace
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by fastestofthefast on
Sunday, 23rd January 2005 @ 08:18:55 PM AEST
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I enjoyed the rhyme in the rather dismal poem. He is with you everyday.
-eric |
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Re: Fallen from Grace
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by afterdark on
Sunday, 23rd January 2005 @ 08:25:22 PM AEST
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| He liked the rhyme? What the crap was that all he got from it..Twit..This was amazing hun..Your life holds more value to some of us then you will know..A masterpiece again. |
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Re: Fallen from Grace
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by fastestofthefast on
Sunday, 23rd January 2005 @ 08:35:43 PM AEST
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| It was great, i didn't mean that i didn't like your poem, i just meant that it had a sad tone, this is the first poem i've read that you wrote and i can see you have to be a great writer. |
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Re: Fallen from Grace
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by ForeverAlone on
Sunday, 23rd January 2005 @ 09:04:47 PM AEST
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| Yet another great work with words, Great write |
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Re: Fallen from Grace
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by venkat on
Monday, 24th January 2005 @ 03:19:08 AM AEST
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| Such a sad feeling.. very beautifully expressed..:-) venkat |
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Re: Fallen from Grace
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by subchild on
Monday, 24th January 2005 @ 07:33:56 AM AEST
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| Intense and very deep feel here. |
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Re: Fallen from Grace
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by killingmehslowly on
Monday, 24th January 2005 @ 10:37:14 PM AEST
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| Amazing write, you're a very skilled writer. I think this is something that everybody can relate to at some point and in some way. But remember, you mean alot to many people here. Therefore your life, your existence is no where near a waste. -Sami- |
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