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Bundle up for a bundle
Contributed by
rxqueen
on
Sunday, 23rd January 2005 @ 02:04:35 PM in AEST
Topic:
drugabuse
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Frostbitten nose
numb down to his callosed toes
waiting for a dime
trying to to pass the lingering time
maybe this night will be
another escape from reality
but no retreat to sleep will come
unless he gets his mind numb
not like his cold toes
and his frostbitten runny nose
but his cup sits empty on the ground
no cash he has yet found
to get himself that blue wax-paper heaven
to inject in front of the Seven 11
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2005-01-23 14:04:35]
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Re: Bundle up for a bundle
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by blowfish_jane on
Sunday, 23rd January 2005 @ 02:10:01 PM AEST
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Hmmm interesting write, i liked the way the ryming goes.
It works and blends very nicely to create a good poem.
nice write as always Jocelyn.
Jane x |
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Re: Bundle up for a bundle
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by DorianChambers on
Sunday, 23rd January 2005 @ 02:48:29 PM AEST
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any one critsizing u apparently has never been homless, a good poem, and a good deed from a good heart . . .
Dorian Chambers |
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Re: Bundle up for a bundle
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 23rd January 2005 @ 02:54:09 PM AEST
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| criticize you,never ,I commend you for your good deed.Also a very good write. |
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Re: Bundle up for a bundle
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by dark_descent on
Sunday, 23rd January 2005 @ 04:37:09 PM AEST
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| interesting development of sympathy. I can understand your donation |
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Re: Bundle up for a bundle
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by bobotheclown on
Sunday, 23rd January 2005 @ 10:00:01 PM AEST
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I thought this was a well written poem I liked
the rhyming in it. I don't mean to criticize, but I
do question your judgment how is giving
someone money to get high helping them?
You are just feeding their addiction... I don't
get it.
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: Bundle up for a bundle
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by hauntedscorp on
Wednesday, 25th May 2005 @ 11:18:35 PM AEST
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| I liked this, good job. I don't think there's anything wrong with your deed...You helped someone escape a very grim reality; if only for a little while. Scorp. |
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