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I Have Rebuilt Myself
Contributed by
deadreckoning1983
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Thursday, 20th January 2005 @ 02:44:28 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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I have come apart.
Disassembled and left to rust.
Trying to peice myself back together,
Looking for the manual.
Finding only the nuts and bolts of it all,
Of ME all!!!
Strewn across this junkyard dreamland,
Hoping to reattach my shattered limbs.
Voice pattern waves so frail and cracked,
Leaving only an imprint of an emotion.
Trying to find the male and female connectors.
Hooking up the wires,
And testing this microphone throat.
Sodering the circuitry
Until the occular cavities are receptive to sense.
Replacing my heart with an engine,
Eight hundred horses of love....... or hate.
Replacing my brain with the bits and scraps of newspaper,
Retaining that little shred of sanity I have left in a locket.
This is the beginning of a hostile take over,
And you haven't known me until now.
Copyright ©
deadreckoning1983
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2005-01-20 14:44:28]
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Re: I Have Rebuilt Myself
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by TaintedSoul on
Thursday, 20th January 2005 @ 03:38:58 PM AEST
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The images you've described fit so perfectly with emotional distress and how we overcome the obstacles in life - whether it be good or bad. Profound write.
peace
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Re: I Have Rebuilt Myself
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by eyesxcriedxout1989 on
Thursday, 20th January 2005 @ 04:50:51 PM AEST
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My jaw hit the floor...twice...nope, there it goes again. Thrice you've made my jaw fall...This was an absolute modern poetic masterpiece...I see you as the guy who takes over the world of poetry...Good luck with the linguist thing...I love you cuz, peace be with you
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Re: I Have Rebuilt Myself
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by Vampirequeen on
Thursday, 20th January 2005 @ 08:33:55 PM AEST
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| An amazing piece Dane.Long time no see .i have not seen you here for awhile.again great job on the poem.take care.. |
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Re: I Have Rebuilt Myself
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by the_Ghost_Moth on
Thursday, 20th January 2005 @ 09:40:06 PM AEST
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Seems to be a junk-automobile theme
you're working on,
like I did with radios and music
on Overdrive Velocity.
You inspired me to do that stuff,
to develop my phrasing.
It's good to see you back,
and know you're writing;
still geting it done!
--Ghosty |
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Re: I Have Rebuilt Myself
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by blowfish_jane on
Thursday, 27th January 2005 @ 03:38:12 PM AEST
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A very moving piece Dane, i just love the way you write. Keep them comming.
*hugs*
Jane x |
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Re: I Have Rebuilt Myself
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by Nazmythian on
Thursday, 27th January 2005 @ 04:50:53 PM AEST
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"Replacing my heart with an engine,
Eight hundred horses of love....... or hate."
Amen Brotha !!! Turn the key and let her Rrip !!! A ... Supercharged, fuel injected, intercooled, hemi powered, emotional wreck !! Built from survival instinct and need ... ready to cut down anything that dares to stand in the way, and carry off those brave enough to hop aboard.
Dane ... ? More !!!! Get some high octane love flowin around the wasteland !!!
Nazzy ~ |
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Re: I Have Rebuilt Myself
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by hauntedscorp on
Sunday, 12th October 2014 @ 11:03:08 AM AEST
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Those last two lines slaaaayyyy.
I am always fascinated by poems where the theme is overcoming. Rising from the ashes, or a counter attack, if you will. I find it to be a creative platform for writers, and interesting to note the comparisons they choose. I enjoyed the way you likened yourself to scraps in a junkyard. Rebuilding yourself bolt by bolt, calmly gunning for a better you.
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