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Neutrality
Contributed by
deadreckoning1983
on
Thursday, 20th January 2005 @ 02:26:54 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Places of intersection,
Times of passing and forgetting.
People and faces meeting,
Details left between the markers and roadsigns.
Memories lost like a pocket watch
In a roadside cafe.
Stumbling onto the freeway,
Looking for an exit.
Remains of a life once full,
Lay rotting and scattered, soaking up the sun.
Bone, hair, blood, mashed into the pavement.
The beautiful colors of life,
Slung against this black canvas.
A drunken car wreck of a kiss.
Passion fading away with the traffic.
The speakers twitch and fade,
As the battery gives way.
Acid burning thru cables,
Severing ties the years wore thin.
The only person who found neutrality
Was the hooker.
Silently standing on Jefferson and Baltimore.
Watching me bleed in the glass,
Shattered on the road.
Watching the traffic disappear into the twilight.
Copyright ©
deadreckoning1983
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2005-01-20 14:26:54]
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Re: Neutrality
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by eyesxcriedxout1989 on
Thursday, 20th January 2005 @ 04:44:07 PM AEST
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I can't even begin to tell you how awesome this is...there is so much I want to say and I don't know how to say it...This was beautiful Dane, simply that...Excellence
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Re: Neutrality
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by the_Ghost_Moth on
Thursday, 20th January 2005 @ 09:36:24 PM AEST
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Cool stuff, Dane.
But the hooker was a big surprise.
Incredible phrases.
There's good stuff in here...
"memories lost like a pocket watch"
--ghosty |
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Re: Neutrality
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by Vampirequeen on
Friday, 21st January 2005 @ 12:54:00 AM AEST
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| very interesting Dane.your writes now days are so different then any other i have ever read.very refreshing.great write. |
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Re: Neutrality
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by blowfish_jane on
Thursday, 27th January 2005 @ 03:31:48 PM AEST
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Dane, what a powerful write. I havent see your poems in a long time and good for me i checked your page today. I really missed your poems and i hope to read more of it soon.
Jane x |
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Re: Neutrality
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by Nazmythian on
Thursday, 27th January 2005 @ 04:42:28 PM AEST
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Hey Dean !!! ( Dane, you did it to me again ... I am amazed with the imagery of the words and the way you tie them all together. I don't know that I have read anything better from you. If I have ... I can not recall )
Nazzy ~
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Re: Neutrality
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by Silent-No-More on
Thursday, 17th February 2005 @ 11:26:33 PM AEST
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Start to finish fabulous, Dane. If you didn't already have me by "A drunken car wreck of a kiss" (and you did), I would have been on board at that point.
Great write! It really deserves more attention.
Seriously glad I came looking,
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Re: Neutrality
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by ladyfawn on
Tuesday, 1st July 2014 @ 10:05:51 PM AEST
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tragically beautiful, stunning in its raw shock n' awe
factor, i absolutely love this, its brilliant and just
amazingly penned,
hugs n' love nessa
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Re: Neutrality
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by hauntedscorp on
Saturday, 25th October 2014 @ 10:22:57 PM AEST
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Impressive use of imagery with vivid wordplay. This is fantastic! I re-read it several times so I could soak it all up again. Great stuff.
~Scorp |
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