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My own fairy tail
Contributed by
deepdarkthinker
on
Thursday, 20th January 2005 @ 10:28:49 AM in AEST
Topic:
fantasy
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I'm in a world with crystal water falls, and castles.
In my room I lay in a bed of tassels.
Waiting for my prince charming.
I look out the window, and see dwarves farming, and a knight jousting,
and girls in waiting swooning over him.
I relax and think of the sweet kiss my prince will give me to win my affection.
I heard a stone hit my window and it got my attettion.
My prince had finaaly came, but first the dragon to tame.
Afterwards he climbed up the vines like in Shakespars time,
and his lips touched mine, then my alarm clock went off, it was nine.
Time to get up and face the real world, with all its despair.
These people do not live in castles but in boxes,
and lie in a bed of dirt not tassels
Its all so unfair
No dragons to tame, nothing but money to obtain.
and well my prince will not come and show his affection,
for he is locked up, his rights afflicted.
Its sad to know that this is my life, but
I can always dream of this fairy tail scean.
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Re: My own fairy tail
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by TaintedSoul on
Thursday, 20th January 2005 @ 10:56:34 AM AEST
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There are many out there who long for that fairy tale dream to come true. For the longest time I thought that fabled knight would show his face but then reality settled in. Nice image to hold in one's heart but don't let it cloud your judgment.
peace
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Re: My own fairy tail
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by tiny_mo on
Thursday, 20th January 2005 @ 11:26:26 AM AEST
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I think that it is a good thing to be dreaming of your own little fairy tail...otherwise life would seem too dull and boring. Great poem keep it up.
Mo
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Re: My own fairy tail
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by Rhymingron on
Thursday, 20th January 2005 @ 11:35:22 AM AEST
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| I really liked your use of rhymn. I'm not being picky, but take a look at lthe line that reads, "My prince had finally came." Should be come. |
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Re: My own fairy tail
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by Rhymingron on
Thursday, 20th January 2005 @ 11:36:32 AM AEST
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| I meant to add that I really like your poem. |
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Re: My own fairy tail
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by eeeitak on
Monday, 1st September 2008 @ 02:48:50 PM AEST
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Wow!
This started off as what seemed to be a happy fantasy poem,
then takes an unexpected turn.
I love it, very original, and the poem itself is beautifully crafted.
Well done!!!
--Katie |
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