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I'm the Enemy
Contributed by
breny
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Wednesday, 19th January 2005 @ 10:20:22 PM in AEST
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i wish i could tell you
what it is thats in my heart
but i think that if i do
you will rip my world apart
it hurts me so bad
that i can't talk to you
and you make me feel
like you are being untrue
all of my emotions
are balled up inside
and the only way to fix it
is curl up and cry
you take what i say
and turn it against me
i can't tell you how i feel
i become the enemy
i think it is ending
there is nothing left to do
i really want to end it
and there will be no "me and you"
but then i stop and think
is this really what i want
if i saw you with her
it wouldn't be so nonchalant
my heart would break to peices
my soul'd be ripped in two
and all that i would think about
is being happy and with you
i don't know what i want
and even less of what to do
all that i know is that
something's wrong with me and you
i hope that we can fix it
and finally love again
but if nothing happens
i'll be forced to cause more pain
don't make me hurt us both
i want to work this out
but i can't promise you a future
without a little doubt
Copyright ©
breny
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2005-01-19 22:20:22]
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Re: I'm the Enemy
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by Kuro_Mirai on
Wednesday, 19th January 2005 @ 10:37:03 PM AEST
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| I really enjoyed this, it flows really well and it expresses so much confusion and sadness. Well done, I really like it. |
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Re: I'm the Enemy
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by DorianChambers on
Wednesday, 19th January 2005 @ 11:02:37 PM AEST
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poeticlaly it's a gem of writting, u were on a mission and didn't need 2 think what 2 write it came naturaly, as 4 the situation, and the contents
all i can say is good luck sorry 4 your pain and i hope all works out 4u . . .
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Re: I'm the Enemy
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by MorbidDeath on
Thursday, 20th January 2005 @ 01:23:04 AM AEST
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Loved this poem it describes how i feel exactly and how may others must too
but i can't promise you a future
without a little doubt
These lines are so true and yet so sinical and sad
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Re: I'm the Enemy
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 20th January 2005 @ 08:47:04 AM AEST
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I like this alot. It has good flow and the emotion leaps out to the reader.
As for the message. I think you definately need to talk!
Good luck! and keep writing! |
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Re: I'm the Enemy
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by littlemo911 on
Saturday, 22nd January 2005 @ 05:32:20 AM AEST
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| omg thats exactly how i feel. i never know how i feel sometimes. i change my mind alot. |
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