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thought you were cool
Contributed by
vampyrekiss
on
Wednesday, 19th January 2005 @ 08:44:18 PM in AEST
Topic:
psychoticpoems
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As I approach with a smile
You turn your head
Eyes closed, nose pointed to the sky
You pretend you don’t see me cry
And for some lame reason
I thought you were cool
As I approach with a smile
I point my forty-five
Your eyes widen as you beg for your life
And you turn your head one last time
And for some lame reason
I thought you were cool
Your long blonde hair fell so confidently
As it hit the concrete floor
Your greatest love now stained
As your innocence pours from your veins
And for some lame reason
I thought you were cool
I’ll never forget the sound of your scream
The bullet I shot was meant for your head
It’s your turn to cry now
Only you cry tears of blood
And for some lame reason
I thought you were cool
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Re: thought you were cool
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by Kione on
Wednesday, 19th January 2005 @ 08:49:03 PM AEST
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That poems is simply Magnificent
Only one pet peave. The Wording...
I think it would flow a bit better if it went:
And I thought
For some lame reason
You, were cool
Just my opinion though. Nicely done :) |
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Re: thought you were cool
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by DorianChambers on
Wednesday, 19th January 2005 @ 11:17:10 PM AEST
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oh definately anger, whats weired is looking at the tittle i was compelled 2 read this don't ask me y not 2 mention i was angry while reading it, great peace of writting u r a very effective writter . . .
Dorian Chambers |
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