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a little too far
Contributed by
cinderella88
on
Wednesday, 19th January 2005 @ 02:23:23 AM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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You don’t know what it feels like
To not know who you are
Looks like this time baby
You’ve pushed me a little too far
I’ve gone over the edge this time
I’m past the point of no return
Just the mention of your name right now
Causes my stomach to churn
Blood flows so freely
From the wounds that will never show
The cuts across my knuckles
Hide a pain you’ll never know
Lack of sleep and helplessness
Have gotten me this far
Looks like this time baby
You’ve pushed me a little to far
“Breathe now baby, just breathe The life away…"
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cinderella88
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2005-01-19 02:23:23]
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Re: a little too far
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by Spike on
Wednesday, 19th January 2005 @ 04:16:01 AM AEST
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Whoa! that was a strong write and a tad unsettling. Hmmm. Lets hope this is an internal monologue - I'd hate to be on the receiving end. And the last line? very impressive.
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Re: a little too far
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by Stitch on
Wednesday, 19th January 2005 @ 06:15:40 AM AEST
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These work well as lyrics. Felt they cut off a bit abruptly though.
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Re: a little too far
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by TheRaven on
Wednesday, 19th January 2005 @ 11:43:45 AM AEST
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yes i agree, very awesome last line, so powerful. such a great write, very sad. keep it up
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Re: a little too far
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by morgana on
Saturday, 12th February 2005 @ 11:35:53 PM AEST
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| great write! the same thing happened to me...but i gota go to court now lol |
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