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Invisable
Contributed by
ForeverAlone
on
Monday, 17th January 2005 @ 01:34:05 AM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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Numb and broken, I stand here alone
None of you know me, none of you would
Dumb and never spoken, I set here alone
None of you see me, none of you should
Frail and blamed, I lay here alone
None of you hear me, none of you could
Pail and decayed, I died here alone
None of you miss me , none of you tried
None of you knew the Invisable child
Took a lonely last breath, slit his wrists
And bled to
Death
Copyright ©
ForeverAlone
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2005-01-17 01:34:05]
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Re: Invisable
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by emystar on
Monday, 17th January 2005 @ 01:38:29 AM AEST
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Very sad but written well. I certainly pray this is jus writing.
luv, huggs, prayer,
emy |
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Re: Invisable
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by pUnKa_RaCh on
Monday, 17th January 2005 @ 02:20:56 AM AEST
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| this was breathtaking!!!! SO good, its so tragic...it bought a tear to my eye:( the last stanza is very moving, excellent piece it really is...and i want you to know i understand how u feel and have felt low myself......u so try to remember you are not alone...thanku for sharing. well done again. |
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Re: Invisable
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by wolfman on
Monday, 17th January 2005 @ 01:34:42 PM AEST
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you are not invisible you have become something that people dont want to see so they try to look past it and if they cant then they just dont pay attention, there will be many who would miss you is you werent here any more many people love you its just hare to see them through all these feelings but there are there just waiting for you to come back, so please come back.
this is sad but interesting poem I like how you wrote it the flow was nice and it realy hit home with me, but please dont give up you will be able to make it through this life of pain and then things will be bewtter. good write please post more later.
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Re: Invisable
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by satans_angel on
Tuesday, 18th January 2005 @ 09:11:15 PM AEST
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| wow...i really feel you...and i cant really say i know what you are going through...but i feel i have an idea...keep up the wonderful writing ...you should read some of mine... ;o)....luv, the angel |
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Re: Invisable
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by Essentially9 on
Wednesday, 19th January 2005 @ 09:26:51 PM AEST
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| even the invisible leave footprints. |
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