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Perfect End
Contributed by
essentially9
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Sunday, 16th January 2005 @ 09:00:06 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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Perfect End
The music fades away
Along with all of this pain
As I use the razor blade
I'm lost in the darkness
Till the sun comes up
I'm drowning in the emptiness
Unable to rise above
I'm getting what I wanted
Since happiness couldn't be gotten
I've gotten what I wanted
With all this blood that's fallen
I don't need
To bleed
I just need to die this way
With the music that fades away
Along with all of this pain
As I use the razor blade
To end this perfect day
And this life that's meant nothing anyway
Copyright ©
essentially9
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2005-01-16 21:00:06]
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Re: Perfect End
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by xfrozenwindx on
Sunday, 16th January 2005 @ 09:51:08 PM AEST
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That is sad, I hope you don't always feel that way. Things will get better.
Excellent write! You did a great job, hope to hear more poems from you soon.
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Re: Perfect End
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by mina-1 on
Monday, 17th January 2005 @ 02:46:06 AM AEST
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such a sad write.
on the other hand it's written so well
keep up the great work.
Hope things have perked up 4 u |
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Re: Perfect End
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by little_genna on
Monday, 17th January 2005 @ 10:11:44 AM AEST
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woah this one hit my heart.
it is written with such a powerful emotion.
i know everyone says that things will perk up....
...harsh reality they only will if you want them to.
Im going to read this again and again its such a good poem...
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Re: Perfect End
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by afterdark on
Monday, 17th January 2005 @ 12:51:16 PM AEST
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| Another fine job..Give yourself more credit cause damnitt you should be getting a helluva lot more. |
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Re: Perfect End
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by wolfman on
Monday, 17th January 2005 @ 01:28:14 PM AEST
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this peom is very sad I dont exactly know what you are going through but I do have an idea I do hope that you are able to get through this and not make a mistakeso please dont give up.
this is an interesting piece its so simple and yeat so deep it tells much with few words very well writen I do like it, but please tell me that this is just you writing and not something that you are thinking about. hope to read mor of your work later.
wolfman |
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