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To Him Who Sleeps
Contributed by
friend7299
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Sunday, 16th January 2005 @ 04:17:01 AM in AEST
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As he gazes out over the vast emptiness that surrounds him,
A cold breeze runs its fingers across his face.
The reminder of the day before still remains deep within.
Not sure how or why or where he was in this place.
A sudden realisation comes over him of falling down.
Every emotion he went through came for the fall.
With a thump he hit the bottom and was left on his own.
Nothing to see, not a soul in sight, and no one to call.
How or why he ended here he still does not know.
Only to see nothing in front or behind or either side.
Vast emptiness but now he hears the sound of a flow.
Rising to his feet he follows the sound, is it a tide?
The sound is louder now and he can just see it.
A river flowing making its way somewhere.
Could it take him to a place he should stand or sit?
All that he knows is he wants to get there.
He follows the river that is swift, strong, and wild.
Soon he will be there at this river’s end.
Will it be near the ocean or meet with another that is mild?
Will it be long or is it just round the bend?
Before he can get there he is lifted up and carried away.
Floating and soaring and flying around.
Then thump, again he comes down again in a new day.
Back down to earth and now wide awake on the ground.
He rubs his eyes and familiar sights he does see.
His pillow and sheets and bed on the floor.
He wondered what just happened and why could it be?
It was just a dream, and forgotten now, as he opens the door.
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Re: To Him Who Sleeps
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by emystar on
Sunday, 16th January 2005 @ 04:50:10 AM AEST
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Very good. I actually had an incident some what in this range of thinking but a dream couldn't take me where I went. I'm not sure if my poem titled HEAVEN is here, about my experience. I'm sure it's here or in archives.
very good writing. I really luv the way u write 'cause in the realm u write in not many can comprehend but i tottally can relate to your work.
luv, huggs, smiles,
emy |
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Re: To Him Who Sleeps
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by EverlastingDawn on
Sunday, 16th January 2005 @ 07:42:57 AM AEST
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| It's a great poem. There is a spelling problem, though. In line five. A really like the beautiful imagery, and the alliteration. The meaning of this poem is portrayed nicely, also. Deep, but not deep enough to be confusing. Great write. |
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Re: To Him Who Sleeps
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by Rhymingron on
Sunday, 16th January 2005 @ 08:29:18 AM AEST
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| This is just the way dreams are. You capture it beautifully while using all the poetic tools. Good job. |
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Re: To Him Who Sleeps
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by Rum on
Friday, 13th October 2006 @ 06:44:54 PM AEST
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| I really love this poem! It flows so well! There were a couple grammar errors like the spelling of realization. I loved the first couple stanzas immensely but a couple lines from the last parts seemed a little rushed. Overall, it is one of the best I've read on this site so far. |
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