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Winter attack
Contributed by
socialmisfit
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Sunday, 16th January 2005 @ 12:26:23 AM in AEST
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bitter tongs of winter
assault upon my senses
chilling winds through the broken door
"only this and nothing more...."
huddled by the fire
keep the frost at bay
flickering shadows on the wall
thoughts of warmth, memory's that's all
and the wind keeps attacking....and the chill stays
"gently rapping, tap tap taping"
fearsome is the night
winters outpost of despair
hope an illusion
a whimsical thought, no longer their
huddled in the darkness,
hope shattered beyond recognition
surely all will perish
dieing without a whisper
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2005-01-16 00:26:23]
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Re: Winter attack
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by Kuro_Mirai on
Sunday, 16th January 2005 @ 01:21:21 AM AEST
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| Wow, you wrote this when you were bored? I like it, it's really good. |
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Re: Winter attack
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 16th January 2005 @ 12:23:55 PM AEST
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"winters outpost of despair"
Very nice phrasing, SM. However, I would have liked it if you could have ended with your rhymes as you had interjected them previously, since I thought they were very well done. This is my opinion, though - I still think this is a worthwhile read. Also, remember the spell-checker. *nods* |
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